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Breaking The Habit


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 98
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I just now noticed that the title is like the linkin park song lol. That was not intended. Anyways this is another poem for David i know i know why do i keep writing about him...well he's my muse sooooooooo there haha. Anyways tell me what you think.


Breaking The Habit



Trying to break this habit
of you and me
trying to let go
of what we use to be

of how you use to hold me
and how you let me go
of how you lied a million times
and how she let me know

uh huh you said you loved me
i guess now you wanna take it back
now i understand you
your game got mad wack

so i finally broke that habit
you know the one of you and me
where i go from here?
i guess i'll wait and see.




Submitted on 2005-11-28 17:32:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  cool. short but good. i hate cheaters too. i think the [censored]'s pretty lame. if u wanna [censored] around that's cool but don't do it while ur in a relationship. if ur a couple, u have a commitment to ur partner. don't sweat it babe. this [censored] can't hurt u anymore. it can only make u stronger
| Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  princess, i must say i hate people like that. it's total BS to be treated like that. I have the same problem with my friends. they say their loyal to me and all, but when i turn my back they always want to talk about me. it really makes me mad. sure its not with a lover and all, but i kind of share the same feeling with my friends sometimes. later, and you might wanna change the third line in the last stanza.

where i go from here?

perhaps you should change it to "where do i go from here", of course its fine, i just thought it could be better like that. sorry if that makes you mad! later!



Insphered soul
| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]
  i hate it when people go on and on about how great you are, and how theyd never be mad at you and blah blah blah talk is so freaking cheap. in case my little rant isnt obvious enough ill tell you. that happened to me recently. and its so wrong. because they shouldnt give you soo much and then take it away. its like suffering from withdrawal.

man now im thinkin about it again.

nice poem.

winter flower-private joke between me and the guy who ripped out my heart
| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked it. I think it could use some "'s and commas and stuff. but other than that, none of the flows or words or rhymes need to be changed...
| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by AngryAtTheWorld | [ Reply to This ]


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