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    dots Submission Name: You (Part 2)dots
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    Author: Liminality
    ASL Info:    15/Male/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 8/13/6
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 190
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1246



    Description:
       THis is a follow up or second part on "You" so lemme know what you think, if you haven't read "You" i don't think you will be lost of anything, it plays off of it but its fine by its self.


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    dotsYou (Part 2)dots
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    I knew you were my world.
    I thought I was in love.
    I knew you'd be mine.

    Now I live not knowing,
    What our relationship means,
    Will it ever be right? Will we ever be together?

    Every day I live,
    I die,
    Because you’re not by my side.

    Every breath I take,
    I suffocate,
    Because you’re not mine.

    I love you,
    I try hard to want the best for you,
    No matter who the best is.

    Yet I burn, and suffer each time you are with someone else.
    It hurts me to see you loving another person,
    The way I love you, and long to be loved.

    I go on,
    I wish you the best,
    I will be here for you.

    I put on my happy face.
    I’m excited for you and your new lover.
    Even though every time it hurts more and more.

    Why can’t I tell you that I love you?
    That I want you to be mine, and only mine.
    I wish you truly knew of the feelings I have for you.

    You are my world,
    Its hard living in a world you love that doesn’t love you back in the same way,
    But… I will always love you, no matter what.




    Submitted on 2005-11-28 19:19:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I've had these feelings often, the time in which they live on are always so hard. I liked this write, probaly could be fixed up here and there, but what peice couldnt.

    The flow went on and off some, but I really did like it, good job.

    Keep it up, and also, good luck with this, stay positive.

    -Miss M.
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]



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