Sweet Release

Author: lucianraven ASL Info:    21/M/Spfld Il Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 49 /67 /19 Words: 78

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Sweet Release

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Sharp pain instant relief Worries, cares, concerns, all flow out, out and away slowly guilt sets in The thought of friends, worried, wondering why Of familiar voices, hurt and afraid a promise broken for what? fleeting moments of freedom? Unburdened by the chains of life a swath of red a razor hits the floor Happiness cares forgotten before, despair sinks in again is it worth it? for just a taste? a taste of sweet release?

Submitted on 2005-11-28 19:38:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i understand and can relate to that. you talked about the guilt and despair that many people feel. i read your backround though and if you ever need to vent...im around with an ear to listen. i was a big time cutter until i realized how much it actually did hurt the people i love. but it took along time to stop...cutting is addicting but the anwser to your question, no its not worth it. xoxoxomuchlove-ash

| Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]

Wow, very nice write. Im sure all of us have felt this at least a little before.. like "am I being selfish to just get this pain out.. but what about everyone else.. et cetera" I think that you conveyed the guilt of cutting really well. Nice descriptions! Amber

| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]

adding to my favourites, because Its really how I feel just now. That's all I want, is that sweet release...thank you for writing this...

| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by AngryAtTheWorld | [ Reply to This ]

I deal with this problem and I loved reading this, you are doing good to realize that there are ways to deal. good job. i look forward to hearing more from you

| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by lesh09 | [ Reply to This ]

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