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    dots Submission Name: Sweet Releasedots
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    Author: lucianraven
    ASL Info:    21/M/Spfld Il
    Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 49/67/19
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 890
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 576



    Description:
       I'm kinda just hoping to vent, this poem has.. personal meaning for me, so I guess just drop a line about whether you liked it? A background, hmmm... well, one could say that I'm writing this to keep myself from DOING this.*sigh* This just to vent i suppose. Well, enjoy, maybe leave a comment on your opinion...


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    dotsSweet Releasedots
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    Sharp pain
    instant relief
    Worries, cares, concerns,
    all flow out,
    out and away
    slowly guilt sets in
    The thought of friends, worried, wondering why
    Of familiar voices, hurt and afraid
    a promise broken
    for what?
    fleeting moments of freedom?
    Unburdened by the chains of life
    a swath of red
    a razor hits the floor
    Happiness
    cares forgotten
    before,
    despair sinks in again
    is it worth it?
    for just a taste?
    a taste of sweet release?




    Submitted on 2005-11-28 19:38:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i understand and can relate to that. you talked about the guilt and despair that many people feel. i read your backround though and if you ever need to vent...im around with an ear to listen.
    i was a big time cutter until i realized how much it actually did hurt the people i love. but it took along time to stop...cutting is addicting but the anwser to your question, no its not worth it.
    xoxoxomuchlove-ash
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, very nice write. Im sure all of us have felt this at least a little before.. like "am I being selfish to just get this pain out.. but what about everyone else.. et cetera"
    I think that you conveyed the guilt of cutting really well. Nice descriptions!
    Amber
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]
      adding to my favourites, because Its really how
    I feel just now. That's all I want, is that sweet release...thank you for writing this...
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by AngryAtTheWorld | [ Reply to This ]
      I deal with this problem and I loved reading this, you are doing good to realize that there are ways to deal. good job. i look forward to hearing more from you
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by lesh09 | [ Reply to This ]


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