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Author:	lucianraven
ASL Info:	21/M/Spfld Il
Elite Ratio:	3.46 - 49/67/19
Words:	78

Class/Type:	Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
Total Views:	984
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	576

Description:
I'm kinda just hoping to vent, this poem has.. personal meaning for me, so I guess just drop a line about whether you liked it? A background, hmmm... well, one could say that I'm writing this to keep myself from DOING this.*sigh* This just to vent i suppose. Well, enjoy, maybe leave a comment on your opinion...

Sweet Release dots

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Sharp pain
instant relief
Worries, cares, concerns,
all flow out,
out and away
slowly guilt sets in
The thought of friends, worried, wondering why
Of familiar voices, hurt and afraid
a promise broken
for what?
fleeting moments of freedom?
Unburdened by the chains of life
a swath of red
a razor hits the floor
Happiness
cares forgotten
before,
despair sinks in again
is it worth it?
for just a taste?
a taste of sweet release?

Submitted on 2005-11-28 19:38:28 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i understand and can relate to that. you talked about the guilt and despair that many people feel. i read your backround though and if you ever need to vent...im around with an ear to listen.
i was a big time cutter until i realized how much it actually did hurt the people i love. but it took along time to stop...cutting is addicting but the anwser to your question, no its not worth it.
xoxoxomuchlove-ash
| Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, very nice write. Im sure all of us have felt this at least a little before.. like "am I being selfish to just get this pain out.. but what about everyone else.. et cetera"
I think that you conveyed the guilt of cutting really well. Nice descriptions!
Amber
| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]
  adding to my favourites, because Its really how
I feel just now. That's all I want, is that sweet release...thank you for writing this...
| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by AngryAtTheWorld | [ Reply to This ]
  I deal with this problem and I loved reading this, you are doing good to realize that there are ways to deal. good job. i look forward to hearing more from you
| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by lesh09 | [ Reply to This ]

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