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Sweet Release

Author: lucianraven
ASL Info:    21/M/Spfld Il
Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 49 /67 /19
Words: 78
Class/Type: Poetry /Cutting or Mutilation
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I'm kinda just hoping to vent, this poem has.. personal meaning for me, so I guess just drop a line about whether you liked it? A background, hmmm... well, one could say that I'm writing this to keep myself from DOING this.*sigh* This just to vent i suppose. Well, enjoy, maybe leave a comment on your opinion...

Sweet Release

Sharp pain
instant relief
Worries, cares, concerns,
all flow out,
out and away
slowly guilt sets in
The thought of friends, worried, wondering why
Of familiar voices, hurt and afraid
a promise broken
for what?
fleeting moments of freedom?
Unburdened by the chains of life
a swath of red
a razor hits the floor
cares forgotten
despair sinks in again
is it worth it?
for just a taste?
a taste of sweet release?

Submitted on 2005-11-28 19:38:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i understand and can relate to that. you talked about the guilt and despair that many people feel. i read your backround though and if you ever need to around with an ear to listen.
i was a big time cutter until i realized how much it actually did hurt the people i love. but it took along time to stop...cutting is addicting but the anwser to your question, no its not worth it.
| Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, very nice write. Im sure all of us have felt this at least a little before.. like "am I being selfish to just get this pain out.. but what about everyone else.. et cetera"
I think that you conveyed the guilt of cutting really well. Nice descriptions!
| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]
  adding to my favourites, because Its really how
I feel just now. That's all I want, is that sweet release...thank you for writing this...
| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by AngryAtTheWorld | [ Reply to This ]
  I deal with this problem and I loved reading this, you are doing good to realize that there are ways to deal. good job. i look forward to hearing more from you
| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by lesh09 | [ Reply to This ]

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