Description: The first stanza really sums up the whole song. Have you ever been somewhere with a lot of people and look over at someone, and you find them looking at you, and at that moment that you make eye contact they look away (or kinda smile then they look at the first possible object, other than a human), well that's what this song is about. But I added how I get so easily mesmerized that I want the verbal meeting to be so perfect, that I fear that I will ruin everything as in the chorus "this is my introduction to disaster" this is a very creative piece, because I've never read a poem/song about this topic...so tell me what you think about it.
We Exchanged Eyes -------------------------------------------
I look over
and I find you looking back
at the glance of each others' eyes
we look away,
and with a smile
you pretend you saw nothing at all
I never
thought that observations
could mean so much
but they do
to me
mentally
you feel
the same way
as me...
I think?
Don't you
feel the same way
as I do?
I asked my question
so give me an answer
and from all the way
across the room
I saw the face
I've only seen
in my dreams
where we meet
and make a connection
and where I have courage
and self confidence
and for that split second
a relationship was born
a bond that was instantly broken
and this has happened before
maybe I just scare myself away from you
I think you're trying to make sure
I don't think we're more than we (really) are
This is my introduction
to disaster,
prelude to another
heart broken me,
I know how this story ends
before it even begins
a "Goodbye" before a "Hello"
and another lonely me
We exchanged eyes
I look over
and I find you looking back
at the glance of each other's eyes
we look away
it was a quick break of concentration
'cause now you pretend that nothing's there
and that I don't exist anymore
This is my introduction
to disaster,
prelude to another
heart broken me,
I know how this story ends,
before it even begins,
a "Goodbye" before a "Hello"
and another lonely me
Absolutly, positively under my fave's. Eyes speak. Don't get me wrong, I love to talk, but you can read people through their eyes. I love when you have a moment like this... a moment of absolute electricity... I'm a sucker for moments like this... my friends make fun of me... When it happens, and because you've written this song, I know its happened to you, you fall in and out of love in a split second, or lust, or something of the sort. I always joke around about how that moment is like finding your soulmate... but like I said... my friends think I'm an absolute moron. Its good to know someone agrees. But really, girls who know how to "work it" if you will use this technique to lure the boys in. I'm sure boys use it too, but girls master it, and then use it to their advantage... so be careful to not get too suckered in! -Ann.
I just read the title and I started to giggle...I was thinking along the lines of exchanging phone numbers...only exchanging eyes. I guess it would bring a whole new meaning to seeing the world through someone else's eyes. hehehehe But seriously - Can you imagine it? You see a hott chic and you go up and swap eyeballs...how peculiar...
Onto the song: "This is my introduction to disaster, prelude to another heart broken me, I know how this story ends before it even begins a "Goodbye" before a "Hello" and another lonely me"
I really liked that...it was heartbreaking, but in a good way - ya know? Like your favourite movie that still makes you cry... Keep Writing -Caribou-
Aww, I think this is really sweet, but awesome at the same time. This song was deffinately true and I can picture it as a very punky song, lol. Good job!
These are good lyrics. I like the story you have told with your words and I know this situation and feeling first hand. It is a kind of awkward feeling and I am not sure why they look away...shyness perhaps? I like your take on this and how you say "a goodbye before a hello". I think that sums up this moment pretty well indeed. That really is what it seems like isnt it?! This one has lots of feelings here and especially a sense of disappointment. I dont see anything here I would suggest you change. I think this is very well written and expressed and speaks of something we all can relate to. Very nicely written. Take care.
Hmm... reminds me of how i met my last boyfriend. I stared at him for so long that he eventually decided to just give in and talk to me lol. Yeah... I hate him now. So anyway, this is so sad. The "Goodbye" before a "Hello" thing started to get to me. So hopeless and lonely. It kind of gave me an empty feeling (in a good way, of course). I don't know. I like it. The whole thing is really good. Very nicely done Great job
Its very sad and it seems hopeless. I like the way its written and some of the wording choices are superb (sp?) I especially like the very last stanza. It seems to somehow fit the best, even though the others all fit remarkably well. I agree with you, the first stanza does seem to sum up the whole lot and I guess that is best in a way. Although I don't think things are really as hopeless as you may feel they are.
Submission Name: We Exchanged Eyes
Great job