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    dots Submission Name: milkdots
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    Author: my shadow
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 291/150/48
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    whiney, weepy, creepy, death seeking jive;
    feeling sorry this and that crap.
    everyone listen to
    hear that same sad
    nobody loves me, I love nobody song.
    jerk it up, take it down.

    long distance messages sent
    collect from across the room,
    get lously reception
    and someone may want to kill
    the messenger;
    if he doesn't kill himself.

    tough titty said the kitty.
    in its wee wisdom,
    but the milk tastes good;
    got to work it to earn it,
    just don't bite momma,
    she got real big claws.



















    Submitted on 2005-11-28 22:25:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      love the emotion and seeming self loathing. i didn't really get why the second stanza was there, but i love the last stanza about the momma kitty having big claws -- it flowed real well.
    | Posted on 2008-12-19 00:00:00 | by Myopic | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is one of the most cynical works I have read on here. A tad bit bitter, are we? This is a very descriptive piece, and I can feel the discontent coming through like a Mac truck, buddy! Good Job!

    Indigo Kid
    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this expresses a common theme of struggling in life from a difference perspective. It is a worth while poem. There is something about kitty/cat that has a duality of cuddly/don't hurt me, just like life. Thanks for the refresher course in walking the line.
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by Eris | [ Reply to This ]
      The stanza with the "Kitty" Is that a "You gotta worke hard for what you get but dont bite the hand that feeds" type thing or did I read it totally wrong??? I liked this. Even though it didnt seem to have a rhyme scheme it flowed O so well. I like the different messages that you have in each stanza AND the "listen to me whine, I hate you" the way you made fun of it made me laugh. nice job

    <3 Adalae
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]


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