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    dots Submission Name: Motherdots
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    Author: AlabamaFarmGirl
    ASL Info:    50/F/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 518/333/26
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1121
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1448



    Description:
       Dedicated to my dear sweet, giving Mother!!!!!!
    Whom I love with all my heart!!!!!!!


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    dotsMotherdots
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    When we were little and very small
    Mom would look out for us all
    Making sure we were tucked in tight
    Looking in on us each and every night
    She made a house of haven and rest
    Causing us to feel so very blessed
    We had such a loving and caring home
    Always having someone, never alone
    A big hearty breakfast every morn
    Loved since the day we were born
    Along with the other dishes she fixed
    Three kinds of beans would be mixed
    Large, baby Lima's and navy beans too
    For us children, that is what she would do
    Fixing all our clothes and mend our hearts
    When someone had hurt it and tore it apart
    Coming in from school in the afternoons
    A lemony smell of freshness in every room
    Remembering now that I am grown
    How Mom made our house a home
    Filling our home with such loving care
    Holding those memories close and dear
    Myself, praying to have her giving heart
    Without a gift, she would let no one part
    She will give you the clothes off of her rack
    And Mom will not expect anything back
    Out of her cabinets, groceries she will give
    Making sure you have, this is how she lives
    Mom is a great big diamond in my eyes
    Her giving does not take me by surprise
    That is just the kind of woman she is
    And for this, I feel surely blessed




    Submitted on 2005-11-29 11:09:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi Linda it is good to be back this simply the most beautiful words I have red in a long time my friend. Your mother would be so very proud of this one for it is a beutiful tribute to her love for you nd your family. It is great to read your words and it takes me back in time to when my mother ws alive and the warm and cozy feeling of Home so thank you this is another fav of yours for me.
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a wonderful tribute to your mother, Linda! It is full of the warmth and magic that a loving, caring mother can give to a home and all who live there!! A home tended by a loving caring mother literally "brims" with goodness and the inviting, tender feelings of Home!!!
    | Posted on 2007-05-12 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful! This was a lovely poem and a great way to show your gratitude and love for your Mom....I've done one too..and it really does feel so good to see your Mom wiping off a happy tear while reading a poem you've composed on just how wonderful you think she is! Great Write!
    | Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      Indeed you were blessed to have such a wonderful mother. Sounds like you had a great environment to grow up in. Wouldn't it be great if every child could have what you had and every mother could be as great as your mom was. I think you have a great sister too, and I am sure she feels the same about you.
    DJ
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a very joyful read and this poem surely does express the love you have for your mother and I know she is very proud of this piece of poetry of yours and other children should read this maybe they might be inpired to write something about their own mother or parents totally enjoyed this and your unique way of writing your feelings treuly a blessing in its'self.
    | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
      Steve is right
    the love that you express for your mother is so much more important that sticking to strict poetic rules...
    i am sure that your mother will love ( or does love) this heart warming, sincere, charmingly written trbute
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by ertha | [ Reply to This ]
      A tribute to your mother. Every child should take a page from your book.

    Yeah, I can remember the days growning up also. The part about the smells in the house brought back memories of Cinnimon.
    To this day every time I smell cinnimon I get home sick

    Thank you very much fro sharing your mother with us.

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent ode to your Mum, Linda, I'd be giving it to her, as I know she'll be thrilled.

    A lovely little waltz through childhood memories, reminding everyone of the magical years of growing up...and how imprtant a part Mother played in it.

    well done

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a lovely tribute to your mother. She sounds like a wonderful person. I think anyone who has a great mom will be able to relate well to this poem. I know I certainly can. My mom is my best friend. It has always been just me and her for my whole life. My dad died when I was four and I am an only child. Me and my mom are only 19 years apart in age, and we have the most wonderful relationship. She is the best woman I know and the most wonderful mother anyone could have. She is a strong lady and raised me well and now that I am older, we are even closer and the best of friends. You have written a lovely poem dedicated to your mom. I dont see anything I would change and I think you should give her a copy of this. It would surely make her day! Beautiful poem. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a nicely written tale about your mom. The form is a little loose, but, in a way, that almost gives it it's charm. You seem to be more interested in sharing your love for your mom than in writing lockstep meter and that's way it should be.

    Keep up the good work,
    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow,
    my eyes started wtering at the end. It was so perfectly described, i could see it in my mind.
    Your poem seemed to follow a pattern, each line rhyming with the next, except for the last two. But i think that it gave it a uniqueness.
    God Bless You,
    J_A
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Judging Angel | [ Reply to This ]
      A mother's love is so pure and unconditional and quite possibly, the purest love of all. So nice to see someone openly celebrating their love for their mum - this makes this a very touching and beautiful write.

    My mum is 75 and still going strong and I make a point of visiting her as often as I can with my two daughters. They love their nan as well.
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      We do have a wonderful Mother
    and I am sure she would be thrilled
    to read this lovely poem you have
    written for her.

    I enjoyed reading it too.

    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutely Beautiful
    You know thru my Writings that I am very big on Family
    My Mom is my Heart
    Her love is so strong for her children
    When my little sister was born Doctors told her she would be stricken with down syndrome her whole life and more then likely not make it
    My Mom refused to give up and dedicated her life to making sure my little sister had one
    That is the ultimate Love
    Your Mom sounds just as strong as my mom
    We are truefully Blessed to see the love family Brings
    God Bless You
    Ron

    This write is going on my Favorites
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice like the other comment said i remember a simalar picture though in my hometown growing up
    good family story
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      It's so wonderful when you can share the love of another in poetry/prose - this is a nice dedication to your mother who loves you so!
    It's nice to have a close family and mothers always are the best!
    Love,Peace,Joy ~ Know,Experience,BE~~~
    tif
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh I get to make the first comment! Hang oon a minute while I read it so I can comment properly...
    I think it is wonderful for one to be close to their Mother or father and you painted a perfect picture of that here.
    Very well done and a very enjoyable read.
    !doc`
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]


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