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    dots Submission Name: Morning Meanderdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 35
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    Description:
       Another nature piece inspired by my Thanksgiving trip through Sierra Nevada Mountains/Lake Tahoe enroute to Reno.

    Love,Peace,Joy ~ Know,Experience,BE~~~

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    dotsMorning Meanderdots
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    Morning Meander
    up the mountain
    awash in morning
    aglow of dawn and moon

    Rippling River
    ever roaming
    silver-tipped rapids
    onward reaching

    Stretching Sun
    awake with a splash
    enlightening song
    serenade our soul




    Submitted on 2005-11-29 14:21:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes! You managed to capture, in my mind, that split second of transition of dusk to dawn. I can see it as I read it and that to me is a nice work of written art! Looking forward to reading more of your poems.
    Cheers,
    RavensWorth
    | Posted on 2005-12-04 00:00:00 | by Ravensworth | [ Reply to This ]
      Rippling River
    ever roaming
    silver-tipped rapids
    ever reaching

    i love these lines.. they make me think of riding the
    rapids on the American River..

    morning meandering indeed up the mountain,
    with such beauty everywhere. a wonderful serenade for the soul.

    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a Beautiful write
    You captured that feeling one gets when they realize the true beauty in front of them
    Very Nice Write
    God Bless
    Ron

    And Thank You for your recent comments
    You like myself write with a lot of emotion in your writes
    I love poetry with meaning and you capture that very essence
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Stretching Sun
    awake with a splash
    enlightening song
    serenade our soul.


    I really like that there stanza.

    the images are there and the beauty that follows them are intact..

    Well done

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      splashing with color on this one. Simply stated with great calm and peace. I wish I had morning such the one you wrote. btw happy late thanksgiving. :)
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]
      What a lovely Morning Meander that must have been. Very descriptive and very good. Reads like you caught it all with your pen most perfectly.
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very nice poem. Filled with wonderful imagery and descriptions that really allow me to feel like I were there...I must admit I am jealous this sounds like it was a wonderful trip! I really like the lines:

    Stretching Sun
    awake with a splash

    I think that is really good. I get this picture in my mind of a painter who is splashing colors on a canvas...I have no idea why but I think it is a really good description of the beauty of the sunrise and all its wonderful colors. And considering it follows the stanza about the river, it adds a very nice touch. Very well written and expressed. It amazes me how much you can say in so few words. Wonderful poem. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      hi thanx for your previous comments
    glad to no you like reading my posts
    this was very colourful and touching for one who believes they have a soul and that we feel things other than with our hands perception
    well done and hope all is well
    thanx again
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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