Yes! You managed to capture, in my mind, that split second of transition of dusk to dawn. I can see it as I read it and that to me is a nice work of written art! Looking forward to reading more of your poems. Cheers, RavensWorth
This is a very nice poem. Filled with wonderful imagery and descriptions that really allow me to feel like I were there...I must admit I am jealous this sounds like it was a wonderful trip! I really like the lines:
Stretching Sun awake with a splash
I think that is really good. I get this picture in my mind of a painter who is splashing colors on a canvas...I have no idea why but I think it is a really good description of the beauty of the sunrise and all its wonderful colors. And considering it follows the stanza about the river, it adds a very nice touch. Very well written and expressed. It amazes me how much you can say in so few words. Wonderful poem. Take care.
hi thanx for your previous comments glad to no you like reading my posts this was very colourful and touching for one who believes they have a soul and that we feel things other than with our hands perception well done and hope all is well thanx again sandman