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    dots Submission Name: papalegbadots
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    Author: papalegba
    ASL Info:    45/male/schenectady ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 52/42/28
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
    Total Views: 637
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    there is a very old man
    who by his hunched appearence
    walking with his cane
    looks on with guideance
    and mystery
    a gatekepper to the other world
    when he is around
    his spirit brings in the smell
    of rum and pipe tabbaco
    if he is pleased with you
    whit that very old man
    he will heal all your ills
    but if he gets pissed off
    he will bring his wrath
    with all the terminal ills
    be sure to give him gifts on the third
    and on mondays candy he needs
    when you smoke think of the papa
    and all will be well
    light a candle of red and white
    and he will appear
    blessed be




    Submitted on 2005-11-29 15:06:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      punctuation and capitalization are over-rated... leave it as it is... random, obscure themes are what i am all about and i loved this poem... it makes me think of an old man i met on the street of DC once - he was as crazy as a bat, but funny as hell...
    awesome poem...
    PEACE and LOVE, greg
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by geherald | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good...awesomly random yet themed...I personally would have liked to know what exactly inspired this one? For the most part this was a very good write..it got a little smashed together but that was one of the few things wrong...the only other thing I can think of is maybe add punctuation. other than that good write.
    peace
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wildly obscure and jostlingly irreverant... I like it;) It gets a bit muddled here and there,(around the injected humor toward the end) and I would, for a defense against confusion, add some punctuation.
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Cigarz | [ Reply to This ]


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