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    dots Submission Name: Wait and Seedots

    Author: Cassius
    ASL Info:    26/M/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 130/177/60
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       Had first two lines in my head when I woke up.. wrote the rest from there that morning.

    Order is 1-2-3-1-4-3-3 and if you know Death Cab for Cutie its sung in that style.

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    dotsWait and Seedots

    I can't believe it's true
    That the only one I love is you
    While my universe is turning blue
    All around me

    I have just one thing to say
    Could you come outside to play
    Change all the same old games
    And make them new

    Looking backwards
    Changing passwords
    You keep trying to hide but I'll find you

    You just wait and see
    That the thing you are searching for is me
    But please try to hurry up
    Because I'm stuck in this tree

    Submitted on 2005-11-29 16:25:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The impression i got was that you were playing a video game or something. i didnt really like it personally i felt it was a bit corny (no affence) better luck next time i guess!
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by Brat05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Original idea, which is very good, but i feel you could do much better though. Use the numbering, but try to do something a little more clever with it.
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]

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