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    dots Submission Name: Nothing to say!dots
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    Author: always thinking
    ASL Info:    30 / female / denver
    Elite Ratio:    4.86 - 59/33/14
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 744
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    dotsNothing to say!dots
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    Could everyone just shut up!
    be quiet
    and be still.
    I need to concentrate on the facts
    what's true
    and what's real

    Im TIRED of talking to people
    who are alway's talkin
    and not sayin nothin!
    I need to hear somthin
    that will make my heart
    start pumpin!

    I need to feel passion
    I need to feel fire
    I want to be stimulated
    elevated
    to feel that desire

    How did we get to this mundane place
    where everyone's stupid
    and the people are
    fake!

    Im looking at you and your looking at me
    but both of us
    are really waiting for the other
    to take it deep!

    make me fall in love
    with your intellect
    bring me to the next level
    please baby make me wet!!!!!!!!!!





    Submitted on 2005-11-29 18:15:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really liked this poem
    Its true we as humans seek stimulation in the form of anothers voice
    We always seek to Learn the answer to all our questions
    I took the last line make me wet
    by meaning
    soak me with your knowledge
    So it may sink in
    and create
    a brighter horizin
    Great write
    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Yea, umm.. i really liked it, but im not sure how to take that last line ya' know? anyway, i especially liked the first stanza, maybe i like the "shut up" but i THINK i like the flow ;) lol. anyway, it was a very... alive poem and i liked it.
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by lucianraven | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I don't know how you wanted us to take that last line but ok! I very much agree with this poem. Although the picture I got must be different from the picture intended. I pictured how everyone is all depressed write now, and how some of us think it gets old. Not that writing about depression is bad. But to wallow in it is a different story. This is a nice piece. I like the "fire" in it.

    Jussy
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Jussy | [ Reply to This ]


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