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    dots Submission Name: No One Heredots
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    Author: LoneWolf
    ASL Info:    16/F/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.35 - 136/108/19
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 965
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 802



    Description:
       this is an extremely old poem, so please don't mind the really messed up second to last stanza and repetition
    i wrote this feeling alone (but that's normal for me) and going thru my notebook, it kind of matches my mood at the moment, so i decided to submit it.
    really, i always feel like No One Is Ever Here... lol i guess that's kinda bad


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    dotsNo One Heredots
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    lonely nights
    hopless fights
    witholding tears
    restraining fears

    standing alone
    in the rain
    i'm always alone
    always inpain

    no one's here
    to see me cry
    nobody's near
    to watch me die

    no one to lean on
    when i'm mad
    who's there to depend on
    when i'm sad?

    i'm always rejected
    by everyone else
    i remain, unprotected
    all by myself

    you dont' understand a thing
    and you dont' know me
    i just hate existin
    i want to die quickly

    i'm losing faith
    given up trust
    without a trace
    i fade into dust

    No One Is Ever Here




    Submitted on 2005-11-29 18:24:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aww that's so sad. Described perfectly though.
    I know exactly what you mean. But even when it seems like no one's there, someone probably is.
    I mean, I feel alone all the time...but I'm not. I know people care, the lonely feeling just seems to overpower it.
    But then again, I don't exactly know you, so I guess I can't really say. But you know what I mean.

    The part that most stuck out for me was:

    "no one to lean on
    when i'm mad
    who's there to depend on
    when i'm sad?"

    That's a good question. It's so hard to depend on people like that. (lol I have lots of trust issues.)
    Anyways, I like this a lot (just like the rest of your stuff). It's simple, but has so much meaning.
    Great job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...so simple with such a deep and ruthless meaning. This was great, I love it.

    I can relate, and it really describes feelings I've got at times. But I've learned I gotta hold on, even if it's just to prove it to myself that I can do it.

    Awesome write, its a fav addition...keep it up.

    -Miss M.
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]
      You did a great job here. I sure am glad that you decided to post this. Great flow and it is a great way for you to get out your feelings. People are always around and I am sure that there are more people than you realize that care for you. Please don't feel so alone...

    Monica
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by mon28 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, this is definitely how I feel today. Pretty much how I feel everyday. No one knows the pain in my heart, there's people around, but in every way there's no one here. Feeling alone and BEING alone is so hard to deal with...I know I can't give up though...take care ok? Great write. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      There is always someone there
    I am not only speaking of God
    But I am refering to Us your friends right here on this sight
    When we put our emotions into words and put them out for others to read we create new friends who like us need to know theres someone there
    You are not alone
    You write very well so know you are reachimg new friends
    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good write...It's amazingly easy to relate to...for me anyway...it does suck to have to lie and pretend you're happy when something's tearing you up inside...I got to the point once with a close friend that I would always just smile and be like "yeah I"m fine" that one day I just smiled and laughed...(I had to sound insane) shook my head no and was like " no I'm not alright" ok anyway great poem..sorry I have to go now peace.
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      First of all, i want to say that i know EXACTLY how you feel, it always seems like I'm alone, even when other people are around, they dont know the real me, all they see is my "happy face" the pressure can really tear you up. Soo.. if you need someone to talk to, you can talk to me. Also, i really liked your poem, i liked how... hmmm how do i say this?... how easy it was to read? does that sound weird? anyway, it had a good flow, it was cool
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by lucianraven | [ Reply to This ]


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