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    dots Submission Name: Dead and gone (never again)dots
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    Author: lucianraven
    ASL Info:    21/M/Spfld Il
    Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 49/67/19
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Rant/Venting
    Total Views: 1304
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    Description:
       If you read the description for "blood and tears" you'll get it.


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    dotsDead and gone (never again)dots
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    Anger ,
    blood and tears,
    form a rock
    A glowing coal of hate
    Within my very soul
    Fists clenched with rage
    Pale blue frightened eyes
    Screams, unheard
    Mercy, ungiven
    Cold, calcuated action
    Bruises
    Pain
    Scars unseen
    Wounds unhealed
    Fear undefeatable
    A sweet, brave young girl
    never again
    who i once knew
    dead and gone
    replaced by shame
    by fear
    by guilt
    who i once knew
    dead and gone

    Dedicated to Zuri




    Submitted on 2005-11-29 19:08:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you write some many poems that are full of depth and pain, i hope your future brightens, i thought the way you layed oyt this piece, suited it very well, as you couldn't really put the words into stanza's, the words you used replyed over and over in my mind especially these lines... screams, unherd. mercy, ungiven. wonderful lines.
    ++My Pain++
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by my pain | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an incredible write from a young mine
    I dont know if it was the feeling you were going for but to me
    this write
    Was about someone who was looking at the male and female traits they have inside

    This write was very thought provoking
    Great Job!
    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an incredible write from a young mine
    I dont know if it was the feeling you were going for but to me
    this write
    Was about someone who was looking at the male and female traits they have inside

    This write was very thought provoking
    Great Job!
    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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