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    dots Submission Name: Abreast of thingsdots
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    Author: toyysruss
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 494/336/134
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Misc/Comedy
    Total Views: 1250
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1029



    Description:
       writing style is the norm 4 me.
    topic came outa nowhere.she must have realllllllllly looked good lol

    all does motivate


    toyysruss


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    dotsAbreast of thingsdots
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    We're the ones,who usually get soaped first
    And we're the ones,who usually get grouped first
    And by the way,we sure can quench a thrist
    Oh,that hurts..........

    Being a guys....
    Is not the most spectacular
    We are the homeless
    We wear hair for warmth
    There's twisters all in the area.
    It takes 50 years for them to grow
    And that's a bad thing.

    Ah!!!!To be a woman's........
    A home we have
    Seperate rooms
    Everyone loves to come to our house
    In this area,no twisters are to be found
    Just gentle breezes,massages all the time.
    Take them out.get thousands of dollars
    Spent on us.Always the center of attention
    We're so loved

    We're the ones,who make it in the door first
    We're the ones,Who quenches mankinds thrist
    And thinking of them,is making my head hurt.....
    ....I'll have a migraine-thank you




    Submitted on 2005-11-29 19:14:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I'm in a good mood today, so when I saw "comedy," I just had to read it.
    That was... lol well, it was different. Very creative, I must say. The way you worded it is excellent. I like it. It made me smile. You are quite talented
    Great job!

    Ooo thank you for the comment and favorites add too Yay I have a fan lol You are too awesome.
    You brightened my day, dear.
    Thanks again

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      ty 4 comment on abreast of things.it was a different topic 4 me=lol.a first to do with anything sexual.it took 5 min to write and i thought it was descent.

    toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this
    Its a different kind of write then what im used to reading
    It does carry a lot of emotion
    I cant help but go back to that old song
    The female of the species is more deadly then the male
    I dont remember who sang it thou
    Great write
    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm, almost the exact opposite of "penis envy" I like it!

    A very subtle little wit in here, it needs to be read closely to see all the work you put in there, I reckon you did a top job!

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a most original piece. I love how you put the genders in their own seperate groups with their own seperate metaphors. "I'll have a migraine-thank you" this was my favorite line of the poem. Nice work, keep it up, and I'll be reading more!

    Jussy
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Jussy | [ Reply to This ]


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