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Abreast of things

Author: toyysruss
Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 494 /336 /134
Words: 141
Class/Type: Misc /Comedy
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writing style is the norm 4 me.
topic came outa nowhere.she must have realllllllllly looked good lol

all does motivate


Abreast of things

We're the ones,who usually get soaped first
And we're the ones,who usually get grouped first
And by the way,we sure can quench a thrist
Oh,that hurts..........

Being a guys....
Is not the most spectacular
We are the homeless
We wear hair for warmth
There's twisters all in the area.
It takes 50 years for them to grow
And that's a bad thing.

Ah!!!!To be a woman's........
A home we have
Seperate rooms
Everyone loves to come to our house
In this area,no twisters are to be found
Just gentle breezes,massages all the time.
Take them out.get thousands of dollars
Spent on us.Always the center of attention
We're so loved

We're the ones,who make it in the door first
We're the ones,Who quenches mankinds thrist
And thinking of them,is making my head hurt.....
....I'll have a migraine-thank you

Submitted on 2005-11-29 19:14:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I'm in a good mood today, so when I saw "comedy," I just had to read it.
That was... lol well, it was different. Very creative, I must say. The way you worded it is excellent. I like it. It made me smile. You are quite talented
Great job!

Ooo thank you for the comment and favorites add too Yay I have a fan lol You are too awesome.
You brightened my day, dear.
Thanks again

| Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  ty 4 comment on abreast of was a different topic 4 me=lol.a first to do with anything took 5 min to write and i thought it was descent.

| Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this
Its a different kind of write then what im used to reading
It does carry a lot of emotion
I cant help but go back to that old song
The female of the species is more deadly then the male
I dont remember who sang it thou
Great write
Take Care
| Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmmm, almost the exact opposite of "penis envy" I like it!

A very subtle little wit in here, it needs to be read closely to see all the work you put in there, I reckon you did a top job!

be happy

| Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a most original piece. I love how you put the genders in their own seperate groups with their own seperate metaphors. "I'll have a migraine-thank you" this was my favorite line of the poem. Nice work, keep it up, and I'll be reading more!

| Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Jussy | [ Reply to This ]

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