The Sea by interstate88

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Submission Name: The Sea dots

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Author:	interstate88
ASL Info:	19 / M / NY
Elite Ratio:	2.68 - 19/25/11
Words:	154

Class/Type:	Poetry/Passion
Total Views:	233
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	894

Description:
Make of it what you may.

The Sea

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What is it that draws us to the sea?

Even they who can not swim,
are drawn to its magnificence.

Looking out across the sea,
even on the worst of days.

It seems to me the wonderful breeze,
takes away our troubles and our pains.

There's nothing I would enjoy more,
then to share a sunset there with you.

So What is it that draws us to the sea?

Is it love or beauty,
or is it just to make believe?

Whatever the reason,
Whatever the cause.

It would be a great priveledge,
To share a moment there with you and you alone.

Submitted on 2005-11-29 19:48:25 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  once again, i kick myself for not discovering your works earlier! this is really beautiful. i love how you didn't just write about some cliché on sea poems (walking with you, sharing with you, etc), but instead you expanded it on reality and the questioning of one's heart:

Is it love or beauty,
or is it just to make believe?

and in doing so, it made the supposedly cliché'd parts void of any cliché whatsoever ;) wonderful work! keep writing <3
- Kez

| Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by everafter | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey, thanks for the comment good sir. I decided I should start commenting kids back more for the feedback they give..but if I had read this randomly I still would comment because this is sweeeeeeeeeeett. plus I love the sea.

anyways, good job.

I hope you enjoy my supreme ability to write awkward comments to others!!
| Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by josephina | [ Reply to This ]

i love the way you caputured the sea as something you wished to share and have in common with someone else

it made the sea seem more "special"

p.s
Even they who can not swim,
are drawn to its magnificence.

i loved that
| Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by Halston | [ Reply to This ]
  wow...very nice...I really like this poem alot. It's meaning is stretch about two things. The sea, and it's beauty, and someone there to spend and see with you. This is a great Write.
| Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by rAbit | [ Reply to This ]
  That is a fantastic poem. Honestly, I'd love to give you some constructive criticism, but I can't think of anything at the moment. This poem has a very nice flow, and it seems heartfelt and written in the heat of a moment. However at the beginning of the 6th strophe, you wrote "Its seems", so, I did think of some criticism afterall, hoora for moi.
| Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Poeht | [ Reply to This ]

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