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    dots Submission Name: what will i do?dots

    Author: Leon Kennedy
    ASL Info:    15/m/La
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 51/75/22
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       this is written for a special person. may she rest in peace

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    dotswhat will i do?dots

    I lifted my hands up to the light,
    and offered to God my plight,
    why didnt he protect the one i love,
    why did he cast her down with a strike from above,

    why did he take away all my happiness,
    why couldnt he fill me with eternal bliss,
    its human nature to turn your back,
    When He doesnt give you what you lack,

    and i cant help but wonder what i will do,
    because He took my life and my all away,
    would a be so bold as to,
    embrace darkness as i lay,

    upon the ground in unbearable pain,
    because my love has drifted away,
    what will i do,
    i can not say,
    but i will not live with this agonizing pain,

    even if it means turning to that which i fear,
    just so i can be near,
    the one who lit my world up so bright,
    the one i can say is my light

    Submitted on 2005-11-29 22:11:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Fantastic Job
    I wanted to read some of your older writes and I must say you had the passion inside fromthe very begining to reach out to people and show them you care
    You are truly a special person
    People can learn so much from your heart
    In this write I actually had tears in my eyes because this write immediately reminded me of my Grandma who was and will always be my Best Friend
    I hope you realize this person will always be in your heart
    Though my Grandma has been gone for 17 years we still talk all the time and her Love helps me to move forward
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    | Posted on 2006-07-06 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this, I have never experienced what it is like to lose someone I love, but through your poem I felt what it would be like if I ever did. All I can say is give it a name all poems deserve to have a name and especially this.

    This was a great write and captured me from start to finish.

    Well Done

    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]
      awww... How sad! Umm... okay I thoguht this was pretty good...but... the first part's ryming doesnt go with the second parts ryming. Yeah, well... other than that thoguh I thought it was really good. I think you captured the emotion of losing someone and wanting to do anything to be with them again. So... with that said... Good Job!

    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]

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