Description: ahhhh....this is nothing---and yes I suppose it is a song but I posted it as poetry.
No Resolve -------------------------------------------
Just one time
why don’t you act for yourself
And think about you
and no-one else
You don’t need to
You don’t have to
Just let me help
Our days were filled
with happy ending tragedy’s
There was no place else
I would rather be
Every day longer than
the one before
The one before……… today
I wish I had more
Now you’re gone
and you left me here
I suppose I'll carry on
But why did you have to?
I thought that I mattered too.
I guess sometimes less than bros
All our hopes
All our woes
things that nobody knows
You know that I know You know
Why did you have to go?
I’ll never forget
The time that we spent
venting talking
lamenting of yesterdays has beens
tomorrows throw- ins
and all the in-betweens
And how you’d always be there for me
No matter what
No matter what
Now what?
What about me?
The first stanza completely set the tone for me to consider this a song/poem about alcohol or a drug ("think about you and noone else... i can help"), but it rapidly disassociated with that and just became a really solid piece that had so much loss in it, but without the whiny bitterness that typically is found in such things. (Especially when I write about it).
The subject was of some interest, but what really sets this apart, in my mind, is the sing-songy, hypnotic series of beats, measures, and rhyming scheme. It is just fantastic, it makes it so fun to read that it could be words out of the phone book and be just as fun. Great write!
This is really quite good and would make a touching song. It makes a touching poem too! This one speaks of friendship really well. It is so hard to find someone that you really connect with. Someone who will stand by your side and be there when you need them. Not talking behind your back when you're not there, but instead defending you in your absence. These people are hard to come across so when you find one, it is devestating to lose them, for whatever reason. We can say we have lots of friends, but when it comes to push and shove, there are a select few that are really worth much. Whether they move, or even die, losing them for whatever reason is really difficult and they are not replacable. Your words speak of a longing, and a confused sadness which is really very good. You get your feelings into the mind of the reader with this. Really nice work. Take care.
Not too shabby, mate, I already had a coupla choices for a melody line. The old story, sure, but you did ok with it, i'd like to here what you wrap it around
Damn it, Lt, get out of my head! lol For me, this hits major home turf. I recently walked away from a friendship I'd had for 8yrs because they could no longer think for themselves and became a complete bytch. Now walking away isn't the problem. It's remember how they were before. I really really liked this. I'm so glad to see you posting again. Traci :)
I don't personally see how this could be considered a song, but I still like it in the way that it is. I know that feeling "what about me?" Sometimes people just get all caught up in their own lives they just don't care anymore. Again, this is something that I really needed to read right now. Just on a personal note...I'm here if you need to talk...anytime...you know my msn is like always connected. Jess
I don't personally see how this could be considered a song, but I still like it in the way that it is. I know that feeling "what about me?" Sometimes people just get all caught up in their own lives they just don't care anymore. Again, this is something that I really needed to read right now. Just on a personal note...I'm here if you need to talk...anytime...you know my msn is like always connected. Jess
I really enjoyed this song, I would love to hear it sung, I am sure it would be even better. I loved the emotions building up in here, being alone. Why?- the question was of course better put, but the always wondering why you?
'I’ll never forget The time that we spent Spending talking of yesterdays has beens tomorrows throw- ins and all the in-betweens And how you’d always be next to me No matter what No matter what Now what? What about me?'
that was my favorite part, it really tied it all together. Sad thoughts, remembering yesterdays & the promises made. What about me? What happened? very thoughtful questions- I enjoyed reading this very much, you did a great job take care ~jennifer
Submission Name: No Resolve
