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    dots Submission Name: Wonderdots
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    Author: auntwheezie
    ASL Info:    45/Female/Dartmouth NS
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 75/57/18
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 168
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsWonderdots
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    To softly touch your face in wonder
    That you could love me so.
    To taste each day that we had loved
    From the softness of your lips.
    I want so much to feel your warmth
    As your body fills my hands,
    And feel the suppleness of your skin
    As we shed our clothes again.
    Magic courses through my being
    each day from lifetimes shared.
    Coming home to my other half
    Peace and happiness filled my life.

    Those memories are still flooding in
    Overwhelming all my senses.
    An ache developed in my heart
    For what is over and done with.
    Hurt and pain are never forgotten
    Throughout the fabric of time.
    Realization of what I've lost
    Crowds the memories of my mind.
    My lifeline was cut to what we'd found
    The moment I touched your hand.




    Submitted on 2005-11-30 07:23:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree. Obviosly written with real love in mind and also much sentiment. The structure was spot on and it flowed effortlessly. Again, a very good write.
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this. The feeling of love come across so strong in the first half, and then you go into how it is when you loose the love you found. It gives one great understanding of how the feeling is, and would be the next best thing to explaining it to someone who has never felt it. Its really original for most of the works i read have one half or the other. This has both. I wouldn't change anything in it. I find it just right. Wonderful job.

    Akai_Ame
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Akai_Ame | [ Reply to This ]



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