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    dots Submission Name: My Frienddots
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    Author: auntwheezie
    ASL Info:    45/Female/Dartmouth NS
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 75/57/18
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 198
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    dotsMy Frienddots
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    She came into my life one day
    A walking, talking hurricane
    Full of anger, life and fun.

    Her spirit caught my attention
    Her smile grabbed my heart.

    Here was a kindred spirit
    Beneath that pain and hurt.
    She was one who really needed
    My help, my friendship, my love.

    Here was someone I could care about
    And be proud to call my friend.

    My friend's life has renewed itself
    Gone are hate and pain.
    The hurt and anger disappeared as well.
    The phoenix has risen again.

    To face new challenges maintain control, and
    Be free to live once more.




    Submitted on 2005-11-30 07:25:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a perfect testament to just how important it is to have the Love of another in your Life
    That Love can literally save your Life
    I know because I have been in the exact same shoes as the main character in this write
    You speak the truth
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      The joy of friendship! To be able to make that connection of true friendship is wonderful. Someone to share your talks, laughter and even tears with. Someone that excepts you for who you are, faults and all.LOL:)
    A nice write!

    Smiles,
    ~Linda
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      thanks for the review of my work I appreciate it. I'll be paying a visit to repay the kindness.
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by auntwheezie | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought it was just fine as it was. It had structure and told a lovely story of friendship. I enjoyed reading it - well done.
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This was...good. I really loved the beginning. The end was great too. But i feel as though there should be something in the middle. I'm unsure as to what, but it seems unfinished. I would suggest that you try to add more to it, but it is your poem so you can decide for your self. ^_^ but however if you do go back and add to it would you send me a message saying you did. I would love to see what you do to it. I think it have great promise. and with a little adding and work it will be truely wonderful ^_^

    Akai_Ame
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Akai_Ame | [ Reply to This ]



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