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    dots Submission Name: Dark Symphonydots
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    Author: Lady Almira
    ASL Info:    16 Female Redding Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 26/37/17
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 188
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1341



    Description:
       This is based off a book I read, none of the words were taken from it, but the idea, the feelings were from the main character in the book. Please tell me what you think.


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    dotsDark Symphonydots
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    Your my dark symphony
    surrounding and filling the lonely night

    The music playing, flowing from you
    shows me all the things to which I am blind

    The day light seems duller
    filled with only faded, washed out color

    Compared to the night
    the world beyond you have shown me

    It is for the night that I long, dream
    and the sight of life you have given me

    You bring forth all that I fear
    all my dreams, all my nightmares

    Your gentle touch upon my shoulder
    comfortas and warms me
    encouraging me top go on

    Through the night I once feared
    but now see clearly through
    I see that my fear was naught
    for the day is the same as the night

    I have fallen in love
    with a man I have never seen
    with a man of the night
    hidden from day and my sight

    I trust in your words, in your soft touch
    I was a wreck before
    fragile and torn
    life was work and living to hard

    The sun is on the rise, the moon coming too
    You can see it in my eyes
    I am going to run
    Head long into the light
    Let the new day dawn
    Let the new night fall
    I am ready, with or without you




    Submitted on 2005-11-30 10:26:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmmm...very neat. I think about how the light seemed to be dull and dreary in the third stanza but then at the end it becomes "the way" it seems. I dunno about the second line in the third stanza though. Seems too long. maybe drop the 'only'.
    Nice write and keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]



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