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    dots Submission Name: Factions of Wealthydots
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    Author: Jussy
    ASL Info:    21 ...guy....waterworld
    Elite Ratio:    4.47 - 66/64/21
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 750
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    Description:
       This is about the learned social classes fed to us for years. We still act childish in this issue.


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    dotsFactions of Wealthydots
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    I stand in a world of the statutory,
    for our insubordinace could freeze the air.
    And I tore at the core
    of your heart to question your empty stare.

    Through my course sincere,
    I attempted to save the healthy.
    But in a sequence of actions,
    in their own secret factions,
    we, in heards, were consumed by the wealthy

    Though we were taught in a childly state,
    we made our segregation clear.
    For a handful of hate,
    and words that sound great,
    whisper lies of class in our ear.




    Submitted on 2005-11-30 16:24:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Oo I love that.
    The way you word stuff is awesome.
    Really. lol You fascinate me.
    I like everything about this.

    My favorite part was:
    "Though we were taught in a childly state,
    we made our segregation clear.
    For a handful of hate,
    and words that sound great,
    whisper lies of class in our ear."

    That says it all.
    I would elaborate more, but I'm not feeling very wordy today. I just read this and thought you should know how much I like it.

    As yours always are, Great job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very deep write
    I may be wrong but I get the feeling that you are saying the wealthy rule the world
    Sadly that is so true
    Money cant buy me Love
    And it sure cant buy the world Love
    Take Care
    Ron

    And Thank You for the recent comments
    I am looking forward to new writes from you
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Well written... The more I read it, the deeper the piece becomes to me. Your poem expressed this social status situation in a great manor. I look forward to checking out more of your work.

    Monica
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by mon28 | [ Reply to This ]


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