Don't Tell Me by Lady Almira

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Author:	Lady Almira
ASL Info:	16 Female Redding Ca
Elite Ratio:	3.41 - 26/37/17
Words:	204

Class/Type:	Lyrics/Being a Teen
Total Views:	227
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1381

Description:
These are lyrics I just came up with in my Chemistry class....about growing up and learning more about this world, and how not to take everything so to heart....let me know what you think....^-^

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Don't tell me that I don't know
what I'm saying now
I have been down this road
far too many times to count

This world around just can't seem
to get my beat, my melody
but that's just fine with me
cause day to day I'm growing up
movin' on, singing softly

You think you know me
but trust me you don't
I've changed from the person
I use to be back then
grown out of you
and all my old dreams

This world around just can't seem
to get my beat, my melody
but that's just fine with me
cause day to day I'm growing up
movin' on, singing softly

Years have gone, days fallen to the weeks
Weeks to months, time's blurred together
Tears have fallen and dried
Crys have sounded and been healed
I've grown up, I'm for real this time
I'm not the girl I use to be
I found the real me

This world around just can't seem
to get my beat, my melody
but that's just fine with me
cause day to day I'm growing up
movin' on, singing softly
singing softly

So don't tell me now......
Don't tell me now.....

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||| Comments |||
  To me, you can't really critique a angst poem. it's a stage that we all have to come through before we can move on. Angst maybe looked down on most of the time, but remember that each one of us have wrote or are writing the same thing, sometimes, their just described as dark, or sadness-but really its all the same.
Better poetry is just opiniative. Really, who can judge who writes the best, or the real poetry?
I just give my thoughts.
and my thought on this is good effort, your poetry is who you are, no one can change that!

Jussy
| Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Jussy | [ Reply to This ]
  wow thast was kinda harsh angelfyre.. and, though it DID seem kinda generic angst, i thought it had a nice flow, it took me a while to assign it a beat, but once i got that i thought it was really great :) i like it, but try to be more original. mk?
| Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by lucianraven | [ Reply to This ]
  This sounds very much like a simple plan song. Very teen angsty...noone understands me...noone gets me...everyone hates me...f**k the world. blah blah blah...but hey, simple plan has billions of fans. This sort of thing sells, just gotta know your audience. Keep on keepin on.

maybe check out the Angst Poetry link at the left hand side of the screen... maybe try righting this again after reading that and the Better Poetry link. You have potential...so keep it up

XOxoXO,
me
| Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]

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