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    dots Submission Name: The 'Procrastinating' Thinkerdots
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    Author: CaramelCandy
    ASL Info:    37 Female NYC
    Elite Ratio:    6.07 - 118/144/57
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Upon thoughts of the image of "The Thinker".


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    dotsThe 'Procrastinating' Thinkerdots
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    Sitting solemnly in solitude
    hand under chin staring within
    at blank thoughts stirring afar.

    Your nakedness stilled by the artist's skillful hands
    while loving desires chill strolling through Pleasantville.
    Lover's lane doesn't refrain or query 'bout:
    What pulses the heart to flutter at the sound of a lover's shout?
    Indulgence you dare not embrace for it eludes your thinking practice.
    Stand erect. Let your observers see the external masterful piece!
    Structured to entice the mind; to create and develop a thinker as well.

    Thinker, why ponder so much when life day to day drifts by?
    Turn left, turn right; must you decipher every movement!
    A strategic chess game requires actions after thought,
    but your thoughts hinder reasoning
    and the quest for knowledge refuses actions.
    Procrastinator, I shall rename you.
    Dare you not come closer to scrutinize me?
    Your fate's position focuses on views --
    let your observers see the internal emptiness....

    You cannot wander to and fro for every step carries meaning...
    a purpose beyond the perimeters of your delicate suitably crafted pedestal.
    You, thinker, do you not speak words without questioning?
    Step down. Don't stare vacantly into your observers eyes.
    Do not cause them to wonder as you do...
    as they go 'round and 'round about you.
    Pause to think for a moment,
    but spend not an eternity in finding the answer.
    For you will forever remain a thinker to many,
    but to me you will be known as a
    PROCRASTINATOR.


    11/30/05, Saby J.R., All Rights Reserved




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      This was a good write! I don't think I ever realized how much I sit and think and allow life to pass me by until I read this piece. I guess I'm a procrastinator too! I really liked how you took this sculpture and gave so much life to it. I will never look at the "Thinker" the same again!
    Great job!

    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm twitching right now. I mean I love this. Only few have a sort of hidden sense of humor as you do about some things. Never sculptured in my life, so I can't say nothing on the "thinker", but your quiet the thinker yourself.

    Ja Matte!
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by akaietowa-ru_18 | [ Reply to This ]
      An excellent write
    I for one am always deep in thought
    I believe you have to be to prepare yourself for the negativity that may lie ahead
    To me the secret is to be prepared for what may cross your path
    Excellent Write!
    Take Care
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
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    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very good, Really.

    I thinker who ponders to much becomes a procastinator. I think I know this well. I am a procastonator but not because I think to much.

    Now, to sit and ponder about making a decision to long could be very bad.

    This is a thinkers write. HEHEHEHE

    The first part threw me off a bit. The thinker ponders about love and the desires wanted. If you wait to long then the one you desire will depart with another.

    Saby I will fav this one so I can learn from it. HEHEHEHEHE

    Very Very good write

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde (A procastinator)
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this piece. It is definitely going on the favorites. This is so unique to any thing I've seen on this sight. You have a gifted style that I'm jealous for. Very nice write. "thinker, why ponder so much when life, day to day, drifts by"
    that was my favorite line of the whole piece. Mostly because I'm a very big thinker. Thinking happens to be my life. Again, most excellent piece, I hope to see more of you. The only thing I could pick out of this poem was some punctuation here and there, but it did'nt much matter. Keep it up, outstanding effort!

    Jussy
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Jussy | [ Reply to This ]


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