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    dots Submission Name: Destined to be alonedots
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    Author: Tuesday23
    ASL Info:    14/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 6/8/2
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Story/Alone
    Total Views: 704
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 454



    Description:
       It's kind of a story of a girl who has an arranged marriage to someone she wasnt in love with. She was in love with someone else and feels alone and afraid without him.

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    dotsDestined to be alonedots
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    Destined to be alone
    bound with the one she didnt truly want

    Longing for the warmth of his loving arms
    he found her
    he would stay with her forever
    or until destiny pulled them apart


    Silence fills the air
    the world is still
    if it moves no one can reassure it did
    no onecan agree they heard it too

    destined to be alone
    to live unhappily ever after




    Submitted on 2005-11-30 21:38:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "if it moves no one can reassure it did"

    that is a powerful line! nice work there, however (IMO) I feel u need something between stanza 2 and 3. A connecting phrase to bridge the two together.

    cheers.



    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]


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