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eyes of the morning dew

Author: salvete
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Class/Type: Deep Thought /Nostalgia
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eyes of the morning dew

in the eyes of the morning dew
i remember the innocence
of walking barefoot with soft pretense
while lost sadness found my laugh

Submitted on 2005-11-30 22:08:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Nothing good can ever last. Everything seems so perfect and innocent; dream it will stay that way forever, but once again,

...lost sadness found my laugh

it fades away. You make it sound so gentle and slowly slips away. Short, but sweet, this piece is wonderful.

| Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by prettybaby | [ Reply to This ]

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