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Test of Time


Author: Marbles
ASL Info:    24/M/IN
Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 46 /70 /19
Words: 62
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Test of Time



Nights are ending and day is beginning.
This cycle occurs without end. Summer, fall, winter, spring, time is fleeting.
It happens as fast as the last snow of winter disappears on the first day of spring.
As this happens we all get older, new things come and old things go,
While, still others will always endure the test of time.




Submitted on 2005-12-01 08:52:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like its short so i didnt get bored of reading it i really like the topic and the way you mention the seasons that was my fave part. good job!
| Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by Brat05 | [ Reply to This ]
  Pretty cool subject matter in this piece, but with all due respect, i don't feel like you have done it justice. I do feel though that you are capable of so much more as a writer.
| Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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