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    dots Submission Name: .Drivendots
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    Author: myonlysalvation
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 41/48/42
    Words: 276
    Class/Type: Personal Quotes/Passion
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    Description:
       i wrote this poem during the hardest most trivial times i've had yet in my life. i guess it means... i'm scared, always & i should be, until i make things better. or until they fall into place.


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    Sometimes i get so self-righteous.
    I've got these dreams & you just lay your dirty schemes
    all around my sacrafices

    A lesson is not learned & then a soul will decay
    i lend you some soft words
    & a moment of clarity
    -YOU must know how hard it is to make it through one day.

    I sleep in a bed of lies
    i wake up next to strangers
    i sink behind metal doors in a cage.
    I dream in Bland- black&gray
    I've lost every ounce of feeling
    my heart has already slipped away.
    -you must know how hard it is. to make it through, just one day-

    in the mourning the sun is dreary- it's like it burns holes through my whrists- when there is no blade- i've left behind everything
    my love, my LIFE. those things just don't seem to exist.
    BUT, I will learn how to paint the clouds
    & love the ability
    they will send the rain down
    I will learn not to dream of memories niavely.
    I'll Remember what they forgot- every word
    & every silence
    I 'll remember every dragging minute of this*
    YOU remember the way the light hit you, out there on the street
    Remember every single second you had it free
    when you threw away the key & put yourself away
    You must know. how hard it is to make it through
    another day




    Submitted on 2005-12-01 10:43:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Instead of drowning yourself in self-pity, you should be out there doing what is right, bettering yourself and your life. Good write, but I see beyond it and it doesn't have to be this way. You can fix it.
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]
      As i said before i feel like you are capable of much more. You have very relateable subjects that you write about, but i feel you could describe them in a much less obvious way.
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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