This is a very deep and personal write What saddens me is that you only look at your sins when death is upon you This is really sad Trust me you have done more Good than bad within your Life Just continue to walk a clear path and theres know doubt you will be in Heaven when Death is near God Bless Ron And Thank You for your recent comments I will be looking for more of your writes Your Friend Ron
I have to say I'm kind of experiencing this right now. All the bad things I've done are being brought back up to taunt me and it's horrible. It really is. I mean I can relate to this so much it isn't even funny. Well maybe it is but you can decide that.
"All my life and all my days My sins come back to taunt my ways"
That's the part that probably describes my life right now.
Well the structure and flow was good. The rhyme scheme was great. Umm so yea not anything left for me to say here other than nice!
This was well done. Thoughts on having to pay for what we have done in life, when we are in death. It is a common thought. Many people wonder what life (if there is one) after death will be like. I can't think of i thing i would change. Even "wrong" i thought sounded fine where it was. The poem almost makes me want to try to make up for all i've done wrong so when i leave this hell i life in, i don't enter another one...but i don't believe i can...There are far too many and not even close to enough time. Wonderful write and keep the talent you have. it will take you places and give you a way to vent.
'I will face all Iíve done wrong ' Take out wrong! this poem had so much great flow to it until you reach this line! without the word wrong, it works better. I really like this, sin is a huge topic i think about, and this is a good interpretation of it.
i like this one it would make a good song sins are in the eyes of the beholder and only the one who created this mess for us can tell what a real sin is not any one frome the race of humankind i feel one mans sin is to another a real blessing that they will find some spiritual blessing and lesson after all there are alot of men of the cloth called to be on the fast track to hell for taking the word of god out of context please keep up the good work