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    dots Submission Name: give up my body in bed.dots
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    Author: lovefatal
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 22/38/19
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Skyy is a brand of vodka.

    ..yep. thats it. just the alcohol mention.


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    dotsgive up my body in bed.dots
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    "fear is a horrible reason for anything
    & its the reason i sleep alone at night."
    & all this time, it was just as easy as this.
    this tendency towards masochistic perfection is just text-book enough to make her smile, & she says, "i've never been this horrible with anyone."
    he looks at her & runs in the other direction, saying over his shoulder & under his breath, "i hope we never do this again
    & i'd be alright if every damn switchfoot song didnt remind me that..."
    she's screaming in her sleep & its keeping up the neighborhood, over & over again, "this isnt poetic. its just not worth it."
    you make me fluent in lack of communication - he's perfect in that so-average-its-amazing kind of way & another night passes,
    so lets fall apart drinking before five in the backs of cars, because somewhere it's written in the Skyy, "thank god i'm such a stoic."
    but somehow he knows that through ex's & formers & impossible situations, she'll be waiting, more impatient than you could ever imagine. & tied to that knowledge is the ease with which he walks away.
    but fear is a horrible reason for anything, & it's the reason he sleeps alone at night.




    Submitted on 2005-12-01 15:00:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This piece is great. I was a little confused at first but then I got the hang of it. The title is wonderful. The title is eyecatching and will cause anyone to pursue interest in this poem.

    but somehow he knows that through ex's & formers & impossible situations, she'll be waiting, more impatient than you could ever imagine. & tied to that knowledge is the ease with which he walks away.

    I love this the most about the poem. That does ease a man's mind after walking away from something so dear. Knowing she will be there even after everyone else is gone. GREAT WORK! I truly enjoyed that write.
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by B-Gentle | [ Reply to This ]
      man oh man, just the length of the lines helps me to read this, does that make sense? I ran through it and once partway through I wanted out. I like the line, "'this isnt poetic. its just not worth it'", that's great. fluent in lack of communication is a wonderful oxymoron, i think. I'm confused at the end of this... but that makes sense doesn't it.
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by graeme | [ Reply to This ]



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