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    dots Submission Name: Winds of Changedots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
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    Description:
       It's WINDY and cold, the skies are dark and ominous but it's still so beautiful. Welcome winter!

    Love,Peace,Joy ~ Know,Experience,BE~~~
    tif

    "Celebrate and enjoy all that yu create, have created. To reject any part of it is to reject a part of yourself. Whatever it is that is now presenting itself as part of your creation, own it, claim it, bless it, be thankful for it. Seek not to condemn it for to condem it is to condemn yourself." Excerpt from Conversations With God


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    dotsWinds of Changedots
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    *SSShhhhhWWWhhhhIIIIssssHHHHH*

    The Winds of Change
    are blowing
    bringing with them Winter

    Is that howling
    the wind
    or the crying of the trees
    as their colorful cloak of fall
    is stripped
    and they are left bare

    Are the rains the Heavens
    crying the tears
    of sorrow to see the seasons
    pass


    Winter may seem
    wicked and cold
    but see how
    he takes the coat
    of foliage
    and covers the land
    nestling the womb of
    life till spring
    and how the
    tears of Heaven
    are the giving
    waters of life







    Submitted on 2005-12-01 15:18:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem just gave me the chills. I loved how you worded it and I could just see the seasons changing in my head. This was definitly unique! You write really well.
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
      Change, something I need desperately in my life right now. Winter depresses me so much, but doesn't it do that too most of us? "tears of Heaven are the giving waters of life" so illustrious.
    | Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it... but a little too fast in transitions for me. Maybe I'm use to my own style. However a very nice piece that describes, what I am going through right now, winter and cold hands...
    | Posted on 2005-12-04 00:00:00 | by Ravensworth | [ Reply to This ]
      I definitely enjoyed this piece. the imagery you used was a perfect choice to display the beauty of winter's coming as opposed to the oft-times displayed dark, cold and dead nature that most other writers decide to use when writing about winter. You very vividly and quite beautifully captured the positive, brighter side of winter, and i applaud you!

    Meow!
    | Posted on 2005-12-04 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]
      What a beautiful way of looking at winter.. instead of the dark, damp, cold that we tend to describe it by.
    Also, the first and second stanza was amazing.. with the sadness of the trees and heaven crying..
    And then you give us a look at winter's warm soul.. with its comforting blanket.
    So nicely done Tif.
    I enjoyed !
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-12-04 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      there is something about winter, to me, that is romantic. I can never pin it down, maybe the chill in the air or the smell of rain...

    Anyway, I totally love the opening line.

    ARRHH!!! My computer is acting up.



    | Posted on 2005-12-04 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the idea that change is a constant. My love of Spring is contingent on Winter being wicked. And seasons are a relative reflection of those cycles that make up life and why we're called human.

    the last stanza is great Tiff, thanks for sharing, very fine!

    peace and love,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      This is another wonderful seasonal poem you have here! I like how you have written this one and the perspective you give to winter. To think of how "he" takes the leaves from the trees to blanket the earth till spring, and how you call the earth the womb is very good. It really is true that we could view the earth or more appropriately...mother earth as the womb that gives life. The leaves provide the insulation to keep her warm until spring arrives. I love that! Very good stuff! And I also like how you question whether the wind is howling or if it is in fact the trees crying as they are stripped of their leaves. This is a wonderful prose, a very creative and interesting view on why nature does what she does. Nice work! Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      As beautiful as it can be I really do not like winter.

    Nice poem Tiff....and dare I say a nice (sound) effect at the start.


    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      Hehehe, this has really good flow, and perfectly awesome imagery. I have nothing negative to say, but just check punctuation and add commas, semicolons, etc. at the ends of lines and stanzas. Also, capitalize the beginning of each line, even though it's weird feeling. Keep writing, because you rock.
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Xochitle15 | [ Reply to This ]
      We can all learn a lot from the change of the seasons. It is such a pity that global warming is slowly but surely removing the distinction of each. If this trend continues, the change of seasons will be no more.
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the unique, original idea of this. Change is a great thing, and it's nice to see writing about a different topic than what is usually written on elite. Keep up the great work!


    ~Kane~
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]


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