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For Those Who Love Me

Author: Munchie_1226
ASL Info:    25/F/E.STL
Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 1831 /1834 /185
Words: 210
Class/Type: Poetry /
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I just all the sudden began never know your own worth until you can help another.

For Those Who Love Me

For those who love me,
I love you, too.
At times I think my whole being,
Is because of you.

The laughs, the tears,
The many words of advice.
For you I’d pass up everything,
And never think twice.

For you I would go,
To the highest of any extent.
Just to supply you with some strength,
And make sure you’re content.

I would run any distance,
Even if my breath were taken away.
Just so I could give you my arms,
And together we could pray.

I would put myself aside,
And leave my problems where they lay.
Just so I can see you smile,
And brighten up your day.

I would learn to listen,
Even if I were going deaf.
I would give you all I could provide,
Even though I myself, would have nothing left.

Just for the feeling of what I supply,
Just for the knowledge to know your alive.
Just for the picture of seeing you smile.
Just for the power from walking the mile.
Just for the moment of hearing you laugh.
Just so I knew we walked the same path.
Just for the emotion of feeling your pain.
Just for the recognition of knowing your name.

Submitted on 2005-12-01 15:59:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love this poem! This one is definately going on my favorites list! It shows how considerate you are of others and I just absolutely love the way you put it all together. (Stands up and claps hands) Bravo!
| Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
  GIRL...U GOT ME WITH THIS ONE...AHHH...I LOVE THIS ISH SO MUCH. ITS GOT FAVORITE WRITTEN ALL OVER IT AND U KNOW IM ADDING IT TO MINE WITHOUT A DOUBT! Everytime I read something from you, I come out learning something new and wanting to apply that in my work...this is really really really really good lol...and that dont even begin to sum it up. job on this
| Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by PrettyRicki | [ Reply to This ]
  Damn. That's all I can say is, damn. This is probably one of the best friendship/love poems ever *smiles*. So for the simple fact that I can't find anything else to say but damn, I am adding this to my favs.


p.s. i don't appreciate your bathroom comment on my page, lol.
| Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
  I can't say which is better, feeling this way about someone or knowing someone feels this way about you. Either way it's pretty damn great.
This is a beautiful piece, LiLi. I think my favorite is the last stanza, that just brings it all home. Great write,
Traci :)
| Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
  You are one of the most UNSELISH persons i've ever known...and for me knowing first hand that every single one of the above words is true...just makes me feel like I'm fortunate to have a friend and most importantly a SISTER like you...

beautiful muse sis...
| Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  musing? damn, I'd love to know what your "deep" thoughts are like. This is really, really sweet. Normally, I don't care much for "sweet" but in this case I'll gladly make an exception. You're a truly talented writer and anyone would be lucky to count you as a friend. Great job, I hope all your friends realize how lucky they are to have found someone like you.
| Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by bentnotbroken | [ Reply to This ]
  you WERE musing huh??? LOL

this is sooo sweet Li shows to everyone here the beautiful heart that you have, that i have known for soooooo long now! it shows to ES the Li Li that gives back so much more than she gets...and the Li Li that always keeps her head up and pushes through it all...just so that she can help others too with a word...

you give smiles, LAUGHTER, and encouragement are such a great person...never forget that!

the TX, one-eyed, home wrecking, vanilla ice lovin, instigatin, butt of allllll the jokes-
-Nikki :P
| Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
  That is gorgeous. The last stanza is my favorite. I really love it. I'm not quite sure what else to say though. My commenting skills keep getting worse.
You never fail to amaze me. As always, Great job

| Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  i like the words and i like the final stanza, i feel the rhythm is a little off in some parts,(very minor details though)
i think it's just a matter of rethinking a couple of words that maybe don't need to be there.
otherwise munchie, love it love it love it.
| Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by thoughts | [ Reply to This ]
You outdid yourself on this write
this is
The best write of yours I have read
It flows perfectly and every word carries its own emotion
Fantastic Job LiLi

Now you can understand just where that Love comes from I always write about

God Bless You
Your Friend Always
| Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  awesome awesome awesome!
it's honest, sweet, so so goood!
you do have a way with words darlin :)
daddy like! i think i'll go put on my leotard now and do an interpretive dance the the Lord of the Rings soundtrack...
| Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
  This could be dedicated to practically anyone. A good friend, a family member boyfriend and etc. I find this very cute and something that everyone should think about. Because I'm sure there are people out there who deserve a lot from someone else to give up something for them. If that made any sense. . haha. I hope you got what I was trying to say. But anywhoo...

I loved the rhyming! It gave it such a good flow and everything seemed perfect from my standpoint. . So I give you as many thumbs up as I can which is probably 2 lol. But if I could I'd give ya more. haha. Nice!

| Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really sweet. It is so true that helping others makes us feel better.
No critiques came to mind. It was just really sweet. I enjoyed reading it very much.
Thanks for sharing. :)
| Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by DisilusndDreamr | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this poem, it puts all the best of friendship into simple lines and expresses it very well. Only advice maybe stick to just one rhyming meter, I was a bit confused when it went from every other line to couplets, but it still flowed well. Great job, I can’t wait to read more.
| Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Lady Almira | [ Reply to This ]
  This reminds me of a quote I read
"Present your family and friends with their eulogies now - they won't be able to hear how much you love them and appreciate them from inside the coffin." ~Unknown.
I believe that quote is so true and wonderful; just like I believe this write is simple, and captivating in that it's so real-life-ish. lol
I like the "For those who love me, I love you, too." beginning. You then led the readers into many different scenarios, memories, and feelings that everyone can relate to.
This is just wonderful. It made me smile and appreciate the family and friends I have.
Thank you for that.
Take care.

| Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]

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