Description: this guy i live with is in the territorial army, im such a pacifist
wake the fuck up! -------------------------------------------
im so fuckin frustrated
with british tradition
i aint patriotic
i aint eatin that bloody animal
and the boy i live with
has his head clouded so much
by bastard sadists
who dont care one jot for him
if we went to war
he would die for
SOMEONE ELSE's ARGUMENT
now what the Fuck is that about
gaze out of the cold glass
green fields permeate my own windows
spoiled by the buildings
ant workers inside creating weapons of
mass destruction
well it makes me violent myself
what a pity
when outsiders are captured
only to be grated,boiled down into ground lead.
SOMEONE ELSE'S ARGUMENT-that line was top-notch. I do like the anger, although I may not totally agree with the politics of it all. I thought the last stanza was much more poetic and image-laden than the first. The first was mostly ANGER, ANGER, ANGER! Then you start talking about green fields permeating your windows. I don't know if it's just me or what, but I felt like it was two different poems, linked only by the mention of WMDs in the second stanza. Thanks for sharing-and maybe take some anger management courses. - Lazy Spleen
Ooo angry. I like it. For some reason, I really liked:
"if we went to war he would die for SOMEONE ELSE's ARGUMENT"
I dont know why. I cant relate and it doesnt remind me of anything. Its just worded well and makes a good point. Anyways, the whole thing is good. You expressed yourself in such a great way. Excellent job
Sadists arn't that bad, I mean I'm one. I feel very afraid of you right now. Hope this don't offend you, but not all of us are like that!
So any ways, ya might want to capatalize some around here, and put in about two more breaks or maybe just one more, to at least make three or four stanzas.
Submission Name: wake the fuck up!
