Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: The Horror, The Horrordots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 997
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 535



    Description:
       I'm just being silly by taking a stab stoic bohemians who tend to dress in black (I'm actually one of them despite my white shirt in that pic, so I guess that is ok). Kath� Kollwitz's art was inspired by suffering and misery, and I'm not trying to make light of that. I greatly admire her work. Here's a link to some of her works http://images.google.com/images?svnum=10&hl=en&rls=GGLB,GGLB:1969-53,GGLB:en&q=Kollwitz&spell=1


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Horror, The Horrordots
    -------------------------------------------


    He accused me of borrowing my face from a Kathe Kollwitz sketch. I smiled, impressed by his knowlege of art and fancying him a soul twin,
    but I tucked in my lips as I noticed his gorgeous frown (fearful that he wouldn't return with a shine of his teeth). My mouth opened and turned upward again as I saw a gleam across his "too cool for love/ too jaded for happiness" face. Then, we shrieked in unison as the light escaping from our moon pale faces revealed that our bat wing black clothes were actually navy.




    Submitted on 2005-12-01 16:33:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I say dumplin, if you ever choose to make a commentary of this type on poetry, especially the poetry of someone on ES, let it be mine, and I just hope that it turns out as brilliant as this did!!!
    | Posted on 2006-04-29 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      This is such a cool piece. I like the whole thing, and how you used 'soul twin' instead of the usual 'soulmates'.
    You're gonna be so famous one day!
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
      the title "the horror, the horror" automatically makes me think of "Heart of Darkness." so I'm not sure if that's the best title for this piece. I also think that I'm missing a lot of this piece because I'm unfamiliar with Kath Kollwitz. However, that's my failling not yours. Catullus tended to tip off his inner circle of like minded neoteric poets all the time in his work. If Catullus can do that so can you.

    Emily
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by VanillaLeaves | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so Funny that I had to laugh like a hyena even though everyone thought I had lost my mind. Like you I am an admirer of Kathe Kollwitz, but a little polking fun never hurt anyone. Love, Lynn
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by greensnake | [ Reply to This ]
      Laughed my ass of at this. The ending was unexpected, creative and delightfully suprising. So serious and then so funny. Catch a quick wit in a little bit of sulleness. I love your writing hunny bun

    Kate
    xxxxxx
    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      After looking at Kathe Kollwitz's sketches from the link the opening made sense to me. She was a really good artist. I like how you said he stated you borrowed your face from a Kollwitz sketch. You said she as inspired by suffering and misery so I can't help but think that these two characters were trying to make light of something horrible. Maybe the loss of a friend? Or just being, as you said, a "stoic bohemian". I like how you claimed he had a "too cool for love/too jaded for happiness" face. That really plays up the bohemian reference. Great job sis. :) I enjoyed it immensely!
    Take care.
    -blt
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      Amy, this is so packed and full of surprises.
    And I want every line to stand apart
    while the images build
    to take in
    line by line
    ordinarily, i like this form but I think this would work well
    with line breaks

    there isn't anything I would change, not one word,
    I love the Degas in your journal too,

    Hugs,

    Nan

    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      One word: Sweet!
    More than one word: don't know the artist (but that's irrelevant)
    I love your description and I know the felling of not-quite-black clothes. What happens next? do they fall in love? do they become embarassed and leave and never talk to each other again. Am I just an ignorane reader? Is that a dumb question?
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by hey.you | [ Reply to This ]
      I got drawn into this...mesmerised you might say. All serious and then a twist of humour at the end. That black navy think made me chuckle. Thanks for that :()
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      this is great Amy! just a little snapshot of a moment
    that you bring to life, it is silly and yet poignant
    in it's presentation. i love the ending! oops,
    our real selves are showing...

    great work!

    much love,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I really find this intresting Amy.

    I do not really know alot about Kath Kolwitz's work...or the lady herself.

    But this write feels deeper then what appears on the surface.

    A underlineing meaning.

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this write
    It was powerful and was able to carry a reader quite comfortably thru it
    I loved the ending
    To me you were referring to how just the way we dress can affect our view for the day
    Excellent Write
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      that was great. i had no idea where it was going, i like the "too cool for love/ too jaded for happiness face." i can see the face now. loved the end line.
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by thoughts | [ Reply to This ]
      Heh, heh, heh...I liked the ending. I was listening to a song called "invisible Kid" while I was reading this and the part of borrowing a face seemed to just click while I was reading. This was short and revealing of a certain type of situation we all like, yet regret "after the fact", ya know?

    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Kinda confused, but oh well. I'm having a fever right now, so that may be the problem. Anyways good right. Short, I like that right now, needed something light hearted to straighten my mood. Never heard of Kath Kolwitz's. Just asking, what type of painting does she do? Modern? Classical? Romantical? Just guessing on the theme. Oh well good write.

    Ja Matte
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by akaietowa-ru_18 | [ Reply to This ]
      LMFAO! Sorry..don't know if I should be laughing but that last line was GREAT! I do that all the time..I get dressed..then when I get to work I notice that I don't match because one item of clothing is really navy and I thought it was black.

    This was very well written. It had a gentleness about it.

    I liked it!

    Much love!

    li
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    83009

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    The Want written by Daniel Barlow
    Untitled written by Daniel Barlow
    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    The Abyss of Love written by poetotoe
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    Beauty Rest written by jackz
    Ciggarettes written by Poetic_tragedy6
    Deep written by Janesaddiction
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    a leaf of shadow and edge written by Daniel Barlow
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Lie back & tan written by Daniel Barlow
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    no sky on the other side written by teika5
    A Worsening Effect written by Daniel Barlow
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Hyle written by endlessgame23
    untitled written by Outlaw
    Meaningless Meanings written by ForgottenGraves
    The World written by jjd
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    FamiliarDemons ©™ written by kyserin

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry