I haven't read a decent Haiku in ages, much less one I could relate to. Oh I like it a lot! Very vivid, very clear... I could feel the burn! NICE! I wouldn't change a thing. However, being a hick in good ole Tennessee I take 2 syllables to say fire... ha!
This is a wonderful hybrid hiaku. Human nature instead of nature you have written this in. You did something that makes haikus hard to write and that is choosing descriptive strong 5-7-5 syllables..Nice. `always write poetry, Cheryl.
I love the effectiveness and illustrative interpretations of minimalism in haikus...I too liked how you portrayed the nature and like a good 12 year scotch it flows perfectly and leaves a pleasant taste that lingers... Very well done and thank you sir, may I have another! Love,Peace,Joy~Feel,Experience,BE~~~ tif
This is a really good haiku! I like how you made the nature part of this the metaphor for the alcohol. Very clever. You capture the sensations of drinking hard liquor very well with your words. Your form is perfect and your word choices are also very good. I love the cleansing at the end. It certainly is isnt it haha! Woooo Hooooo! Smooooooooth! haha! Very good job on this one. Take care.
i, being too young to drink, have of course NO idea what this poem means *cough, cough* that being said, i very much liked it, though typically i prefer straight drinks, not mmixed ones, and i prefer wine, to anything too "fiery" i get a great feeling for this poem, very powerful, thats what i love about haiku so short, but so powerful if done right, and this, was done right :) ~raven~
Hmmm...reminds me of that one bottle of liquor that has a flame on it and right now the name of it escapes me. Its a mixer kind of drink...not many people drink it straight. Its not Goldschlager...hmmm...maybe it will come to me. Ohhhh...FIRESTARTER...yeah, thats the drink. Anyway, I liked this little haiku ya got here. The cool smell of the fire that cleanses...nice invigorating stuff there maynard.
Sorry about that, it's just not many of these and I love them. Big fan of Japan if ya havn't noticed from my name, eh heh. Well good write, and I loved it. Stuck to that atmosphere of the japanese. Oh how I love them, and I love you now to!
I'm feeling giddy today, so yes be afraid of my weird behaivior, I'm a very young teen, and very sick with fever right now, so I ain't acting like myself...