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    dots Submission Name: Unknown Somethingdots
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    Author: auntwheezie
    ASL Info:    45/Female/Dartmouth NS
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 75/57/18
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 181
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       didn't know what love was at the time-wasn't very bright.


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    dotsUnknown Somethingdots
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    Something touches me when
    I think of you
    Filling my heart with joy.
    Something moves me
    When you call my name
    And fills my head with stars.
    Something makes my heart
    Race faster
    Each time I kiss your lips.
    That something makes my knees
    Go weak
    Each time that you are near.
    This something that is affecting me
    Is definitely quite new.
    It's not something you can
    ignore for long.
    What is it do you know?




    Submitted on 2005-12-01 17:55:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Sounds like writers block. The title is misleading because you clearly described the kiss, touch, etc. Sounds very much like you knew what it was, or made it to be what it really wasn't. Not one of your stronger pieces, but I still got love. Keep up the good work. xoxoxo
    | Posted on 2005-12-10 00:00:00 | by UNIQUEWOODS69 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is one of those simple poems that makes me go all fuzzy inside and want to give a call to that special some one just so they can hear it and fell all fuzzy as well.

    Thank you for that.
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Fading Star | [ Reply to This ]
      isn't the word "something" a great word... it's so mysterious. The repetition of the word completely made that poem. it's the confusion and the excitement and the butterflies and the dizziness... it's not quite knowing how to feel. great write!
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by thoughts | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes
    This feeling is called love
    Run too it and capture it for it dosent come around very often
    Dont let it out of your sight
    Its a gift
    treasure it
    A fantastic write!
    Take Care
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance take a look at some of my poetry and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Maybe try not capatalizing the "I" in "Ignore" please. Not good cause you didn't start a new sentence there. I know new line and all, but you have still fit it in with the line above it. Now anyways, this is good in a sort of good natured way, even if I'm not...

    Love is what a person makes it. I think it's pointless, and worth none of our time, and that the feeling we get is just something that can't be fully described, love is just a word for me, but for others it's just a wonderful thing, everything is wonderful about it; it will save your life; it will give you hope, and all. On the other hand some are inbetween these two. I'm not saying you either or you may be. It's for you to know only and for you only to decide.

    Ja Matte
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by akaietowa-ru_18 | [ Reply to This ]
      HA! This was just one of those things that sucks ya in with is brilliant wordsmithing of what a person feels about their expression of the "L" word and then asks that one question at the end that makes a person say, "Woah!", ya know? I dunno. Are you angel or are you foe? Hee-hee! I like it and the description fits the write to a 'T'. Nice write.
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]



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