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    dots Submission Name: Lined Paperdots
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    Author: MyHeart2Yours
    ASL Info:    18.female.Pennsylavnia
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 96/112/42
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 214
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1103



    Description:
       In order for some of this to make sense, the lines "Infamouse lines, Straight lines," should have strike throughs in them, as if someone crossed them out.


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    dotsLined Paperdots
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    Infamous lines drawn on an already lined paper,
    Crossing, swirling, as if to create a message,
    Trying to keep them straight,
    Straight line with no end.
    Crumple the paper, throw it away, once again

    Infamous lines drawn on an already lined paper,
    Edges as sharp as knives ,
    Deep black of charcoal smeared through the blue of lines already th---

    Infamous lines,
    Straight lines,
    Lines with no ends, no beginnings

    Lines with no ends,
    No beginnings,
    No one is sure where to start or where they too will end,
    Many choices laid out in front,
    which one to fallow

    Wonder around, bump into walls,
    blinded by the world before you.
    Mistakes, they are all mistakes

    Erase.

    Lines with no ends, No beginnings,
    From the power at hand, to the force of pressure,
    Write out your feelings,
    play it over again,
    a broken record

    Unfinished, like the charcoal lines of a blue lined paper




    Submitted on 2005-12-02 02:54:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really cool. I like how you said that the lines have no end and no beginning. I agree with you there!
    I also like that one line "Erase." It reminds me of when I'm drawing and the drawing gets all messed up so I have to erase it and start over.
    This poem also kinda reminds me of God because He has no end and no beginning. That's the first thing that came to my mind, heh.
    And I agree with S.A.M. It was neat how you cut off the word on the second stanza. It's confusing but cool at the same time!
    Well, keep up the great work!

    -Shadow
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by Lavender | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow that's really interesting. I like the way you cut off the word there in the end of the second stanza. THis is really creative. Great write.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]



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