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My Love For You

Author: Korean Koala
ASL Info:    16/m/wa
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Words: 230
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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My Love For You

There once was a time
When everyone was in love.
Not being in love was a crime
And the world's leaders were turtle doves.

The the world changed
And people fell apart.
Many became fanged
And all began to fart.

But in in all this chaos
Someone still felt love
For I had felt this warmth
Seemingly sent from above.

I knew I loved her
Before I could even blink.
I knew I wanted to hold her hand,
But before her I would always shrink.

So one day I became a man
And finally asked her out.
My heart leaped with tons of joy.
You know what I'm talking about.

Two months later we fell apart
Because she broke my heart.

Through all this I still loved her
Though the reason I know not why.
We did not talk till after Thanksgiving
After I ate my pie.

I found that she felt sorry
For she thnks she made a mistake.
One day we may come back together,
Possibly during Christmas Break.

There is a single problem.
It happens to be a guy.
He is currently going out with her,
And that just makes me cry.

I will love her forever
Even if she does not believe in 'We'.
For I know in my very heart
She is the girl for me.

Submitted on 2005-12-02 09:18:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  My dear koala. I know how you feel, for I am the only one you open up to now. Is this supposed to be funny or sad? Well, at least you rhymed, though it was... iffy...
| Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by Sephiroth | [ Reply to This ]

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