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    dots Submission Name: With A Bit Of Winedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 704
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 423



    Description:
       This is about faith and how easily it is to digress from it...this girl trades her faith for whine and then again she is told that she is wrong...she is naive and searching...she can't really decide what she wants.


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    dotsWith A Bit Of Winedots
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    she replaced her faith with wine
    fermented berries that stain her mind
    gloved in denial
    gloved in guilt
    wash out the spots
    from her unraveling quilt

    made from the finest vows

    manipulated by the eyes that judge her
    to make her feel change
    to make her break her glass with no eyes
    she believed in a fairytale
    her addiction was real




    Submitted on 2005-12-02 13:29:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the first two lines best, particularly the part that's like "fermented berries that stained her mind." I know what that's like, to try and replace your emotions with alcohol, hoping the sweetness of the drink will mask the bitterness of your heart. Hey, I like that line, I feel a something coming on... This I think may be my favorite thing I have commented on today...
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      i think u meant wine! but dats ok! i like this! it reminds me of a movie i saw on lifetime! where there was a mother who sold her kids for drugs! its was depressing good joB!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      whine- that the way of spelling the cry one. Did you mean wine????

    I really liked it though it didn't seem memorable. As in I'd think of it later, or at all ever again.

    It reminds me of alot of things, all at once I can't really sort them out to get anything specific.
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by Red_reaper | [ Reply to This ]


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