I've noticed that all the poetry that I've read of your's is in the same format. I question how much you can really grow as poet staying in this same style. Anyways, to this specific peice. I like the title, but the connection between it and the poem is very loose. However, I do think the poem is very interesting. My favorite line is " Just one more lost tomorrow". Good write overall.
verry profound. actually quite interesting. I enjoyed it, the rythem and flow. The words you used were exquisite and verry entrancing. And the way you portrayed cutting as a torn smile was nicely done. It seems as if there is more than one message to be percieved from this poem and it could take a while to get them all out. Great work.