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    dots Submission Name: Don't Tell Me Now 2dots
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    Author: Lady Almira
    ASL Info:    16 Female Redding Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 26/37/17
    Words: 341
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 209
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1557



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       Okay angelfrye, tell me what you think of this one..........its for you ^-^


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    dotsDon't Tell Me Now 2dots
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    Don’t say those words to me
    don’t you dare try to drown me out
    I have been down this road
    far to many times to count

    I may be different, I may be new
    I may be just a little to odd for you
    but that’s just fine with me
    cause from minute to minute I’m learning
    growing up, movin’

    You might have known me once
    When I played along with you
    masking who I was, confused
    I didn’t know who I was
    I didn’t know what to do
    but now I’ve grown, learned what I had to

    I may be different, I may be new
    I may be just a little to odd for you
    but that’s just fine with me
    cause from minute to minute I’m learning
    growing up, movin’

    Years have gone, days fallen to the weeks
    weeks to months, time’s blurred together for me
    I have cried, and dried my tears
    I have left behind my mask
    I’ve finally grown up, I’m for real this time
    I’m not the girl I use to be
    I am me, and don’t care so much what others think

    I may be different, I may be new
    I may be just a little to odd for you
    but that’s just fine with me
    cause from minute to minute I’m learning
    growing up, movin’
    movin’

    Don’t tell me now…..
    I’m learnin’…….




    Submitted on 2005-12-02 16:27:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ahhhhhhh, now this is much better. Like a previous reviewer said, it sounds "mature" this one sounds like it comes from an adult(or young adult) relationship and not some infantile teeny bobber with the mental capacity of a 6 year old.lol. This one was fantastic. Great improvement. That was very cool of you to redue it. You got me on this one Lizzie. Truely, nice work. Very subtle differences, well...the content almost still rings true to the first poem, but this one it seems like the perspective is different. If you ever come across a poem of mine you dont like...let me know and I can gaurantee you that I will rewrite it Lizzie. Yup. Keep on keepin on

    XOxoXO,
    me
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]
      needs a gitar, keyboard, and maybe a trumpet in the background...
    I like the "I may be just a little too odd for you"; it just speaks to me. Most of it i can find a tune for, but I can't fit "and don't care so much what others think"
    Can you tell me what type of song it is supposed to be? it would help
    P.S. look into the to/too on line 6- unless you meant it that way, then `~`
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by hey.you | [ Reply to This ]
      there is a positive mature feeling behind this, but i agree with DeadValentine, it sounds like a song. its cool and all and there's the feeling that you are learning and growing on your own. I like that feeling, let it inspire you and become the best you can.


    ~Insphered~
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]
      This sounded a lot like a song. Not one I've heard, but a song. Was it meant to be lyrics? You probably said that and I wasn't paying attention. I think it's lovely that you are trying to remain so positive and determined. A lot of people aren't like that. It's refreshing to read that someone out there is a fighter.

    Stefanie
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by DeadValentine | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this write
    It is so positive
    You are letting us your readers know you refuse to stop but just keep moving forword
    So you may catch your dreams along the way
    I loved this
    Excellent Write!
    Take Care
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]



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