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    dots Submission Name: blackend skydots
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    Author: bloodied_angel
    ASL Info:    15/Female/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 79/119/44
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
    Total Views: 709
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 921



    Description:
       its a stoner poem
    its a little off becase its been a long long time sence i got stoned


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    dotsblackend skydots
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    skies blackened
    tears fall
    truth twisted
    now you cry

    the sky blackened as the sun set
    your tears fell so delicatly upon the floor
    the truth was twisted, now i'm a lier
    your crying now becase you dont know who to beleave
    you dont understand why i had to leave

    scared fleash
    flash backs
    crimson tears
    no moon in the sky

    you inhearated your scares from me
    remembering the past kills doent it?
    the blood that falles dubed crimson tears
    i wander under a moonless sky

    lost fears
    dried tears
    right distorts to wrong
    why am i so wrong

    with one more hit i cant seem to remenber
    i dry my tears i dont know why i cryed
    if its so wrong to get high then why do i have to do just to feel right
    why, why am i so wrong




    Submitted on 2005-12-02 17:00:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this! i never personally gotten high before! i actually think gettin high is lame! but its good! i like the emotion and da darkeness to it! good job! and im ur first commenter! ya i comment on some of my stuff!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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