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blackend sky


Author: bloodied_angel
ASL Info:    15/Female/Oklahoma
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Words: 153
Class/Type: Misc /Depressed
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its a stoner poem
its a little off becase its been a long long time sence i got stoned


blackend sky



skies blackened
tears fall
truth twisted
now you cry

the sky blackened as the sun set
your tears fell so delicatly upon the floor
the truth was twisted, now i'm a lier
your crying now becase you dont know who to beleave
you dont understand why i had to leave

scared fleash
flash backs
crimson tears
no moon in the sky

you inhearated your scares from me
remembering the past kills doent it?
the blood that falles dubed crimson tears
i wander under a moonless sky

lost fears
dried tears
right distorts to wrong
why am i so wrong

with one more hit i cant seem to remenber
i dry my tears i dont know why i cryed
if its so wrong to get high then why do i have to do just to feel right
why, why am i so wrong




Submitted on 2005-12-02 17:00:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like this! i never personally gotten high before! i actually think gettin high is lame! but its good! i like the emotion and da darkeness to it! good job! and im ur first commenter! ya i comment on some of my stuff!
~akaila evonne~
| Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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