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    dots Submission Name: Soldiersdots
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    Author: Autum-Moon
    ASL Info:    15/Female/drowing
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 284/165/29
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Soldiers with there heads hung high,
    And feet apone the ground.
    Even when love,
    Can not be found.

    Holding back tears,
    In a long hours fight.
    Watching friends die,
    In the darkest of night.

    Fighting a war,
    That is not there's.
    And do you think,
    The President cares?

    They left their familys,
    To fight this war.
    I don't understand,
    Whats it for?

    Their children crying,
    From their inocent eyes.
    Hoping their dad,
    Is not the one who dies.

    Wives at home,
    On their knees in prayer.
    Hoping god's listening,
    Hoping he's there.

    Now many soldiers lay dead,
    Row by row.
    Their blood spilt,
    To and frow.

    Now stones make,
    Where they lay.
    Because they went,
    To war that day.


    So I ask the president,
    To hear are crys.
    And to stop,
    His selfish lies.


    To stop the killing,
    Of inocent lives.
    And put down,
    The guns and knives.

    Let them go home,
    To their wives and children.
    That love them so,
    Please Mr. President,
    Let them go.





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      This was very honest in an innocent way & I liked that because grown people in control make a bigger mess of things and a lot of us wonder why?
    Good emotion and sincerity shining through this dedication to soldiers and their families!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smiles 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey,

    Great poem. The president does need to think more before war. There's alot of good lines in it, that portray the brutal truth about war.

    *Let it Flow*
    Raven
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Silent_Tears | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem. I feel the same way. I hate the fact that so many of our people are dying for the President ad that he just lets it happen. I hate that he just sits on his a** and does nothing while there are soldiers are losing their lives for his war. This is a good poem. Adding it to my favorites.
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by ImperfectGirl1 | [ Reply to This ]
      ya, what a lovely country we get lied to by those we elect and go to war over money insited by lies'. a good piece, perhaps just heard/that the same thing so many times that it doesn't quite hit the same. i like it, it gives a point yet still holds onto the emotion. take care
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]


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