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Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 66
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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lol so i guess i tried to mix this with hiphop. I don't know if it worked out or not. Tell me 'cause i need to know. Anyways i want your thoughts. Because i noticed lately that i've been....idk worse at what i'm great at. Makes no sense know but those who read what i write...you already know. Anyways tell me what you think lol. Oh and i need a name so help me out.


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Everythings become too cliché`
all the poetry is getting lame
we write 20 poems about the same thing
like a broken record repeating names
but some of us like to be unique
although the old poets told us not to speak
we write and rap in our own tune
watch out the reformation is starting soon
come out inbrace your destiny
unheard unknown soljahs of poetry




Submitted on 2005-12-02 21:32:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this was alright., it seemed like u were rapping about poetry. hotness. at least u can rhyme. i think u mean "embrace" in line 9. (niggas can't spell). anyways i agree with u. i try to stay unique and write about what i wanna write about, not what's polpular or what people think i should write about. pick ur own style and just let the ink bleed on the page
| Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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