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What If


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
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Words: 89
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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okay guys i know girls cheat too. But that's besides the point. This poem is basicly asking What if i cheated on you. not you personaly but the person in question. Like what would you do if i did everything you did to me. Anyways i want to hear thoughts. Any words of advice.


What If



What if baby
i was just like you
what if i decided
i was gonna cheat too
what if i decided
to walk out the door
would you love me less
or hate me more
what if i showed up to a party
with one of YOUR friends
maybe that's how
all this damn drama began
what if i hurt you
bit by bit
what if i called
your poetry shit
now that i've decided
that this was is
ponder your questions
of what if




Submitted on 2005-12-02 21:38:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this was good and thought provoking. danny ur cheating on me! i hate U! lol. if u called my poetry [censored], i'd say i don't write poetry. yeah this whole situation and the way that ur feeling sucks. this kinda makes me think of karma u know? like ur saying if u cheat on me, i gotta get u back for that [censored]
| Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  Gosh, this one makes you think. Very thought provoking.

If life starts giving back what you gave it, I dunno... it's pretty scary. But the thing that scares me most that eventually what goes around DOES come around to you - I don't know why we don't realise that more often.

Loved the poem. It's the best one I've read in a long time. Good work.

Peace, Judy
| Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
  net. funny how when people make mistakes its so easy to act sefrighteous but they dont even think about how they would feels if the roles were reversed. not everyone but lots of people anyway. nice poem. you know whats sad though? most of the poetry ive read in the past few monhs has stemmed from anger or sadness.. why is it so much easier to write about bad stuff? or is it that theres nothing good to write about?
| Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by namesdontmatter | [ Reply to This ]


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