this is cool I like the style of writing and how you put your self in it and I hope that you work out whats going on with life then maybe you can help me understand mine good write and keep working on it coz your very talented and need to express your self more
mm yea... life is way confuzzling... the title should be 'life is way confuzzling' lol jk well, i think that everyone is prbly trying to figure out their lives durign this time of our lives... liek where we fit and what we'll do in the future. i really like this one, it's pretty neat. i was just wondering, how come that one stanza has four lines when the other ones have only 3? i think that's kinda silly ;P (ae i think it doesn't match), but that's just me. well, keep writing and try to figure yourself out! lol i'm doing the same!
You can work this out You are going thru the same journey I went thru at your age For once grab a hold of the beauty inside of you Release it and let it help improve you Think of yourself Im not saying do not think of others but think of helping yourself Let the love you have guide you and others Stay Positive God Bless Ron
And Thank You for your recent comments I always look forward to hearing from you Take Care Your Friend Ron
Well...the past 2 and a half years I've felt like I've been living in a mass of blackish grey. It's just like you said..the tears come and you try to push them away..you try to get rid of all that darkness but it just finds a way to come back every time. People tell you all the time that it will get better that it won't always be this bad...but no one knows how you really feel..what's really going on inside of you. I just loved this piece. Great job. ~hailie~
nothing good comes from the dark=blackish grey,in no excetion life is full of doubts,no matter the age.i was born confussed=lol.and will die the same when someone tells you it will be alright.it usually means time will be involved to get there=a universal constant.
some descent imagery in this write.reader gets to know how youre feeling. and is a very relatable topic,put into VERY relatable words. questions are asked=always good
interesting... and it doesnt sound like it was written my a 15 year old... impressive...
dont worry though, nothing you ever do or see or learn will ever make complete sense, but that is just the world that we all live in... your family will always be related and friends can almost always relate, so rely on those you can and things will turn out for the best eventually...
and keep writing, you have a unique talent and write far better than many your age... when i was 15 i couldnt have writen anything like this poem, so keep it up... good luck
Submission Name: A mass of Blackish Grey
