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    dots Submission Name: American Soldierdots
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    Author: geherald
    ASL Info:    26/male/PA
    Elite Ratio:    5.07 - 132/127/42
    Words: 282
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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       writen for a few good friends fighting Bush's War...
    and for my dad - Colonel Edmund Herald - who will be in Kuwait City from June to December 2006 at the Army Central Command... May all the Gods and all the Fates work together to bring him and all our other soldiers home to the families that love them... Keep your head down, dad, and come home safe.


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    Just an American Soldier,
    Gonna follow his orders.
    To stand and defend freedom,
    Damn straight weíre gonna beat Ďem.
    He knows how to use that powerful gun,
    But donít mean that itís tons of fun.
    We think we can give liberty,
    So we send our boys off to get dirty.
    Destroying those in our path,
    Our government just unleashed its wrath.
    The rest of the world doesnít see,
    Where we lost our integrity.
    So my friend came home in a cast,
    Will we ever learn from the past?
    We cannot ensure democracy,
    Unless we eliminate hypocrisy.
    What will we leave behind,
    For the next generation here to find?
    (Other than the dirt my friend slept in,
    And the remnants of some destructive weapon.)
    Iíd like to leave them with the earth,
    And then watch my granddaughter give birth.
    So perhaps we should think before we act,
    Who would have guessed? Itís a God-given fact.
    No problems can ever be solved,
    Without someone getting involved.
    You kids, be sure to go to school,
    Mom/Dad donít act like a fool.
    Remember that one American Soldier,
    She was just following an order.
    And on her coffin they draped a flag,
    She died but it ainít no drag.
    I may have lost my future wife,
    But you can live a long, free life.
    My beloved country sent her to war,
    Yet I know not what for.
    How many good friends must be lost?
    How much money is it really gonna cost?
    When will we truly understand,
    What it means to live in this free land?
    The end is near I hope and pray.
    And then I mourn for the dead on this fine day.




    Submitted on 2005-12-02 23:20:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey man,
    i really appreciate this poem. as i have a good friend at the moment who is giving her life in the frontlines in iraq. although she would never harm anyone, she is given an m-16 and told that she must use it to kill and destroy if need be.
    i put myself in her shoes now and again (thank god she's comming home soon) but i imagine if i were in her shoes and faced with the choice to kill or be killed - would i pull the trigger? well, i believe it only depends on the circumstance. if it were to defend my fellow comrade then yes i would pull the trigger (hopefully my aim would be well enough to only shoot the weapen from his/her hands) but if it was just one on one - i believe i would let them take my life if that's what they really wanted.
    because how could i live with myself knowing that i killed someone. i know it is the wrong question to ask if your a soldier, but nevertheless, it is a realistic one.
    thanks for posting this,greg.
    sarah.
    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by vohomegirl | [ Reply to This ]
      youre right this is like my piece too, we have alot of the same issues that are being stated. i read alot of things i didnt give any thought to when writing mine though. very well done, keep it up

    - kase
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      My boyfriend just got back from Iraq about 2 months ago. I won't get into my views on the war...but I thank you for writing this piece. We should all be grateful to the American Soldiers whether we agree with the war or not. Great job. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      there i fixed the typo... its gone... so now its perfect? hehe... yeah its perfect...

    anyways thanks for pointing out the typo, i normally just read over those kind, cause i know what i mean...

    PEACE and LOVE
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by geherald | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very strong poem with a very powerful message. I have to say I agree with you and I like how you labeled this as "Bush's war" in your description. This whole situation has gotten so far out of control and there is no need for us to still be over in Iraq. All we are doing is policing this country and our service men and women are dying everyday. I lost my dad in the military back when I was four so I understand the huge impact it has on the families of those who have to live everyday wondering and worrying and for what? I think this poem is very well written and expressed and I too, hope it ends very soon. Just yesterday I heard we lost 10 marines to a roadside bomb. 10 lives lost, and 10 families whose lives are forever changed with sadness and loss. Such a [censored] tragedy! Makes me angry! Nice job writing this one. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      spendid job or writing, loved the line no problem can ever be solved
    Without someone getting involved the entire poem flowed to the beat of my inner eye seeing all that was described along with the pide for this country and yet the great feeling of being betrayed by those who are suppose to help find solutions to peacefully and safe guard or young men and women I've only one problem with your poem its with a typo in the five line it should be he knows how, not( nows how to use that powerful gun. adnil
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]


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