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    dots Submission Name: Conform to my looksdots
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    Author: MyHeart2Yours
    ASL Info:    18.female.Pennsylavnia
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 96/112/42
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 886
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 590



    Description:
       This was a quick poem that I wrote because I needed a fast way to get out all my feelings.


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    dotsConform to my looksdots
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    Conform to my looks,
    Conform to the look of my face,
    God, you can't know,
    What goes on deep inside.
    I'm shouting,
    I'm trying to burst through,
    Throwing myself up against the brick wall of my mind,
    All around me, and I'm drowning.
    Suffocate me bitch,
    Cut apart my world,
    Rip it all down, go ahead.
    Don't expect me to stand tall for you,
    Let you fall to the knees of everyone else,
    get your kicks else where,
    Cause you've offered me the hardest blow you can throw.




    Submitted on 2005-12-02 23:52:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Whoa...that was good,it flows with speed
    and really shows emotion. I especially like throwing myself against the brick wall of my mind, that was a cool line and I can relate to it.
    Good write.
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by Rapheal | [ Reply to This ]
      is elsewhere one word or is it else where? i saw the word and wondered. i liked that line too. had a tone of finality like i wont do this for you so dont expect me too haha thats so redundant. anyways i liked the poem even though i think you couldve elaborated a bit more at the beginning.
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      you were really open in this poem, and it kinda brought me into the emotions u were feeling

    i like the line "dont expect me to stand tall for you"

    so yeah a real effective poem, b interested 2 hear the story behind it
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by charl_girl | [ Reply to This ]


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