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    dots Submission Name: Beautiful In Reddots
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    Author: Abort_Chaotic
    ASL Info:    19 almost 20
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 201/172/50
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 949
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 859



    Description:
       uhm.. kind've described in the poem.


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    dotsBeautiful In Reddots
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    Another antagonizing act,
    with a gloomy decsion
    wait..
    wait.. react.
    Beautiful and red life utters "abstract"
    heart to heart a single kiss will make a pact.

    Dull and hated;
    shreik in flawless harmony,
    speak a meloncholy plea.
    Beautiful in red,
    "don't stop, please continue for me!"


    Awaken this world,
    To eyes blinking away the irreality.
    Awakening from a teasing hymn, impressively embroiled.

    No more cries.
    Quick! Quick! Look to the sky!
    Scorched in a cloud of red lies,
    You can't surmise, you've seen it with a clear eye.

    A hand where a heart lies,
    Your eyes, your smile, you're my sunrise.
    Beautiful in red, burning in your lovers eyes.




    Submitted on 2005-12-03 00:25:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your eyes, your smile, you're my sunrise

    That is truly poetic. Justin, this is really beautiful. I think it is the best thing I have read from you. It made me feel inspired... I haven't had any inspiration to write anything lately. Excellent!
    | Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by WaxingPoetic | [ Reply to This ]
      I dont even know what to say..I mean wow. This is amazing...I envy the way you managed to grasp the wording so clearly. Im excited to see more from you.
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by Jingles | [ Reply to This ]


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