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    dots Submission Name: Lay Downdots
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    Author: MyHeart2Yours
    ASL Info:    18.female.Pennsylavnia
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 96/112/42
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 192
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 526



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    dotsLay Downdots
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    Lay down bitch,
    Don't struggle it'll only last a min.
    Fight the restraints whore,
    One more smack
    And you fall, to a crumbled mess upon the bed
    Told you not to fight,
    Let me take you as you are,
    without the mask of makeup,
    without the clothes to hide a body scorn with scars
    Let them see you naked for the world to see..
    Let them see what a FUCK UP you are,
    So lay down bitch,
    Don’t struggle,
    It will only last a min.




    Submitted on 2005-12-03 05:03:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Quite disturbing write.I dont like these kind of violent poems but it has to be written.I cant relate because Ive never being in that situation but the vividness and instensity of this poem really struck me.
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by Rapheal | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm, im no sure how to interpret this one.. this kind of pain doesn't see the type to last a minute and the images of struggling naked and open to whatever seems like a hard thing to deal with and write about.. maybe a little more description ,,,
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]



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