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    dots Submission Name: For A Good Time...dots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       THIS CONTAINS ELICIT LANGUAGE AND SEXUAL CONTENT. I read my cousin's poem about a prostitute, and this is kind of my reply to it. With a twist of my own.

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    dotsFor A Good Time...dots

    He tossed his jacket on the floor.
    "Let's do what I came to do."
    She took him in her mouth,
    Felt it harden as it grew.
    He bent her over the bed,
    Discovered there was nothing under her skirt.
    He pressed her up against the wall,
    Gripped her ass so tight it hurt.
    He picked her up off the ground,
    Then lowered her onto his cock.
    He began to thrust into her heat.
    She slyly checked the clock.
    He threw her down upon the bed.
    He fucked her from behind.
    She did her special dance when he put her on top.
    He got off at least three times.
    He gave her body one more longing glance
    As he began to dress.
    His eyes lingered on the curve of her ass,
    His hands longed to caress.
    He picked up his jacket from the floor,
    Wondering what was on her mind.
    She slipped the money into his pocket,
    "Thanks for a lovely time."

    Submitted on 2005-12-03 09:57:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a good poem and I suckede it up and read it and I really like the ending...I think it was really cool...and it flowed really well, you have a talent for this...it really is good.

    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, this was graphic, but I hate censorship so I liked it. It was pretty graphic, strong, and well, good. It was really powerful and forcefully written I felt. Aside from the content, the rhythm of this poem was near perfect. It was also realy direct, ha...didn't really beat around the bush though which was really cool and one of this poem's strengths. I thought it was really good. I gotta say not disturbed but certainly thrown off when I read it. that was really cool, I love when stuff has that effect on me.
    Metal Heart74
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by Metal Heart74 | [ Reply to This ]

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