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    dots Submission Name: lost soul outside my windowdots
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    Author: bloodied_angel
    ASL Info:    15/Female/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 79/119/44
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
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    dotslost soul outside my windowdots
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    there you are again
    my lost little friend
    your so scared
    i watch the tears fall down

    a smile at twisted lies
    truth so gone,
    your lies are incompleate
    you left out a moment in your sinario
    and now i know the truth
    your lost in your self

    the damned wander under my window sile
    can you see them
    they smile as they cry,
    but they will never know why
    why through there happyness they must still shed a tear
    why through there pain they must rip a smile

    "the angels, not half as happy in heaven,
    went enveying her and me"

    with a tear i smile as well
    though fear over take me
    for when i can smile while i cry
    i know there is nothing more to fear
    i wonder under some strangers window
    as he points out his favorit of the damned




    Submitted on 2005-12-03 12:21:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was very well done - there are some minor spelling errors but nothing spell check can't cure

    This is very mature and I stayed in a place once where I saw spirits outside my window but I wasn't ever scared either - so many lost and weary. I really liked, ""the angels, not half as happy in heaven,
    went enveying her and me" very well done!

    love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      a smile to try an overcome the pain
    and cry while happy cuz ther still is sorrow deep down inside
    thas coo the hole under the windowsill thing i got a picture in my head from this poem
    like a hole group of the damned walking in a group to each window and people joining em as they go by ...


    Darkness of the Grim Draco
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]


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